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Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108420#msg108420
« on: July 05, 2010, 06:12:53 pm »
Elements Short Story Competition (Mystery/Sci-fi/Romance)
Time's up!

Mystery fiction is a loosely-defined term that is often used as a synonym for detective fiction or crime fiction— in other words a novel or short story in which a detective (either professional or amateur) investigates and solves a crime.

Romance novels place their primary focus on the relationship and romantic love between two people, and generally have an "emotionally satisfying and optimistic ending."

Science fiction is a genre of fiction. It differs from fantasy in that, within the context of the story, its imaginary elements are largely possible within scientifically  established or scientifically postulated laws of nature.


RULES
    Write a story using one or more of the genres aboveIncorporate into your story creatures, spells, permanents, opponents, anything found in the Elements the gameEntries must be in EnglishEntries must be entirely your own work and never previously published or broadcast, online or offline.Minimum on 500 words.No offensive material. Rule of thumb is that whatever you post as a short story should be something you could post on the forums as well without getting instantly bannedPost your short story on this threadOne entry per person only. You can rewrite your story as many times as you like until the countdown goes to zeroUse software like Microsoft Word (or our forum built-in spell check) to find possible typos and other errors before submitting your storyRemember to include a title

Winner will get tons of respect and an award icon (Creative Writer) under his/her Avatar.

This competition runs for two weeks, after which we will have a vote to determine the winner.

Have fun and Good luck!


P.s. Click the button and read the super cool previous short story competition winning entry by Silkenfist:
ETERNITY
by Silkenfist

The majestic shape of the pyramid grew constantly larger as the two men“ one with delicate elven features, the other a young broad-shouldered Human“ approached. Surrounded by the solemnly humming time factories it had been the focal point of their journey for the past hours.
”Are you sure, this is the right place?” the Human whispered. The other man just cackled quietly.
”It is not a matter of place, Jefferson. It is a matter of time. If we are in the right time, this is the only place to reach.” He sped up the pace as his feet left the sand and hit the solid limestone that made the first step of the pyramid’s entrance.
”The spell should have brought us to a time where nothing exists except Time’s realm itself.” Jefferson nodded. He didn’t mind the lecture. In fact, he sort of requested it when his companion“ of whom he still had to ask the name sooner or later“ stumbled into the tavern and asked for someone to join his expedition to the temple of Time. The other patrons had turned down his request with a laugh, but Jefferson had remained calm. The man had sounded like a madman (and still did), but the prospect of finding the long lost temple of an Element was not to be turned down.
”I shall lend you my company, Sir” he had replied when the other patrons had turned their back on them again ”under the sole condition that I receive an equal share of what is wrested from the temples.”
”If that is so, I reject your offer in your own interest. There is nothing but knowledge and wisdom for me to seek.” The man had turned away again but Jefferson had insisted.
”Then it shall suffice for me to share the knowledge you retrieve. Of course, for this understanding to achieve, I will need to match your current knowledge of our destination. If you are willing to teach, that is.” And so they had gone to purchase the spells and supplies with the Elf instructing Jefferson about their destination: The temple of Time where the Guardian Elementals kept the secrets of the world and were knowledgeable about past and future“ given that one would be able to approach them, of course.

So far, that pursuit had been without serious problems. They both had journeyed through the desert before and knew how to avoid Shrieker incursions and Antlion pits. And the Rewinding spell had worked just like a charm, bringing them close to the very doorstep of the temple they seeked. But now they had entered the home turf of Time. And while that particular Element was not exactly notorious for undue cruelty, there surely was resistance to be expected. Just as if their fears didn’t need further fuel, the men could soon hear a distant clicking sound around them, coming closer the deeper they went into the stone-wrought labyrinth. When they finally identified it, it was almost too late. Mandibles!
”Quintessence!” the Elf screamed and with a quick movement, both men produced a small flask from their belts and downed the contents simultaneously. Their bodies left the physical plane just in time to avoid the starved horde of Scarabs that dove through the corridor towards them. Moving slowly through the swarm of insects, they continued.
”I never asked you if it is not treasure, you seek“ what is your reason to risk your life and sanity, venturing into Time’s realm.” Jefferson looked at the elvish traveler with suspicion.
”Call it a spiritual journey, if you will there are some questions that only a master of time can answer. There are some ghosts in my past I need to clear.”
”And you expect me to believe this?” He felt unable to disguise the disdain in his voice.
”Of course not. But my motives shall not concern you just like yours are not bothering me.” The Elf looked at his cohort but received no answer from him. They quickly left behind the Scarabs and turned towards a hallway that ended in an adorned door of solid gold.
”After you, my friend.”

They passed the door to enter the king’s chamber“ the centre of Time’s keep. Hourglasses filled hundreds of shelves to each side of the room, enshrining a path towards a diamond-crested altar before which an illuminated figure was poised. Its appearance was that of a female Human but its quick and graceful movement gave away its nature immediately. They had expected nothing less than a Guardian Elemental here anyway. Tensed, they watched as the Elemental produced a turtle shield and a gilded spear while assuming battle stance. A cold and metallic voice rang through their ears.
”Intruders! You should know better than setting foot on this ground.” The first spell hurtled towards them but it struck nothing but empty air between the phase-shifted bodies.
”Hold on!” The Elf yelled, showing empty hands and dropping one knee to the ground. ”We are not here to pillage but to beseech. We mean no harm to you or your shrine.”
”If that is so” The Elemental’s face remained stern and motionless as an emptied flask appeared in her hand. A single amber drop fell to the ground. ”then will you explain to me, why I would preconceive an Entropist attack on the temple? Are you the enemy or did you merely clear the path for them?”
”Yes and yes for the two of us.” A sudden smile appeared on Jefferson’s face as he stepped forward past his dumbfounded companion. ”It was quite hard to track down your sanctum but fortunately I had some help.”
”Damned fool” came the hissed reply from behind. ”Do you expect me to just stand aside and allow your desecration?”
”Of course not” Jefferson replied calmly ”I expect you to lend me your full support. Tell me how exactly do you feel right now, my friend? Do you feel the sore muscles? The cold sweat? The warmth slowly crawling through your veins towards the heart? Just as if someone laced your potion with Aflatoxine?” Carelessly, Jefferson discarded the empty bottle. ”Don’t worry about your equal share, though. I came to seek death and we all will get to make his acquaintance today.” He turned to the Elemental when he heard the Elf fall to the ground and cry in his dying throes. In his final moments his anger had suddenly disappeared and a panicked fear had crept into his eyes instead as he watched the two adversaries“ seemingly ignorant to his own fate.
”NO... You must flee! Run for your life! Flee before it is too late!” he pleaded as the first Malignant Cells already wretched themselves from his body.

”I am afraid that is not an option.” the Elemental solemnly replied, watching the Elfs last breath turn into another cankerous cell crawling threateningly towards her. ”But I will impose justice for the life that has been taken in the sacred halls”
”Tough words for a girl with her back to the wall” the Entropist replied. He watched the army of cells spread out and divide further, driving one attack after the other against his opponent. Wave after wave drove the Elemental back. The shield gave her some time to retreat by stalling the cells that struck it, but the damage soon began to show and it would be just a matter of time before she would be overwhelmed.
”Yield!” the Entropist cried triumphantly ”and your death will be quick. This shrine is forfeit either way.”
”How quaint“ do you think, a mere bundle of diseased flesh was enough to overcome one of us?” The Elemental had reached the far end of the hall and retrieved another shield. As the wave of cells launched themselves at her again, she produced her new equipment“ a crimson buckler inscribed with a fire emblem, charring and destroying the enemies that struck her.
”Oh, you decide to pose a challenge after all?” Jefferson smiled and raised an arm. ”Then I shall match your challenge“ Mutate!” He gestured at the remaining cells in an effort to infuse them with the necessary quanta to develop their full potential and bring down not only the weakly Elemental but the entire temple around them. Alas, no magic sprouted from his hand and more cells crashed vainly into the Elementals shield. Desperately, he launched another attempt to use his magic but to no avail. Struck with disbelief, the Entropist dropped to the ground on his knees. Shivering, he held a hand before his face only to find his fear verified“ the purple aura around his arm indicated clearly that it was he who was mutating. Helpless he watched the last of his army die and the Elemental directing her full attention to him once again.
”Do you really think,˜Jefferson’, that an Elemental capable of Precognition would allow herself to be overrun that easily? Now then, tell me: Do you feel it? The wrenching feeling in your guts? The itching just below your skin? The pain in your bones and muscles being stretched and shifted?” The former Entropist before her had lost all distinction and features already, his shapeless mass slowly reforming itself.
”I am quite disappointed, though. I thought your kind would be able to at least notice a Mutation potion when they are slipped one.” She observed the final stages of reforming, unable to hide her delight when she recognized the new shape he was assuming.
”Well then“ It seems that the two of you will get to fulfill your promise after all.” With a subtle gesture she cast a spell through her spear and the last intruder vanished.

The man awoke in the desert. His memory was blanked from any trace that could explain how he arrived at this place“ or his very identity for that matter. The only thing he remembered was the temple of Time and the Elemental he had encountered. It was the only thing about his past that he remembered but it was a lead after all. It was what kept him going for seemingly endless miles until he reached the small town at the brink of the desert. Gathering his last strength, he stumbled towards the local tavern to address the patrons:
”Does anyone feel adventurous? I could need some help on an expedition to the temple of Time.”

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108461#msg108461
« Reply #1 on: July 05, 2010, 08:02:15 pm »
Little Odyssey
It woke up. It realised, it was trapped inside a shell. It tried to brake free, and brake free it did. It looked around and saw a beautiful world, coated in a strange orange glow. It gazed up and saw two orbs, one silver, one gold. It felt the intense heat and it liked it. It felt its wings for the first time in it's life. It tried to fly, but nothing more than the heat produced by the friction between its wings and its skin. It didn't care, it just wanted to know what it is. A sudden memory came to it's mind. It went to the nearest pile of ash and tried to eat. It coughed, as the hard volcanic ash scraped down its throat. It was agitated, and started moving it's wings with greater force than before, and the heat caused its body to burst into flames, which were hot enough to lift it off the ground.

It flew towards an unknown goal, that was closer that it ever thought. At first, it lost some height, as it wasn't used to the cooler atmosphere away from its birth place. As it descended, it saw a moving landscape of a royal blue color, and it wanted to touch such a magnificent surface. As it did, the cold from the surface transferred to its otherwise warm body and it shivered, with surprised and afraid. But it flew on, towards its goal, with the same height as before. As it looked down once again and saw a dark figure approaching, and flew away just in time, any later and a crawler of some kind would grab it.

So it flew as high as it could, from a cold and dangerous landscape to a place, where everything seemed to be made out of pure light. It landed, tired from the flight that literally lasted most of its short life and noticed, that the ground was just warm enough for its comfort. It looked around and saw regions that were a bit darker the rest of the landscape. It went to see, what are these strange places, and as it touched one of those, it shivered.

It flew away from the shining landscape and saw a weird deserted place with seemingly no life at all. It looked up towards the sky, and saw lots of creatures flying around. It went up and saw flies using not fire, but air to fly. It asked the flies to show it to a place to rest, and the flies showed it to a white fluffy structure. As it rested, it realized that those flies weren't so different at all. But before it could ask them anything, they flew away and it had to continue its journey towards it's goal. It was soon that it saw even bigger flies, some producing light, some producing fire, not for flight, but for illumination. It first saw it was flying into a ever darker twilight than too.

All the life in the sky suddenly vanished. It looked down and saw the same landscape than before, but this time there were creatures there. It went down to see them. As it came, a creature tried to attack it. It fought back, but as it looked away the creature split into two. It didn't like this creature, so it flew away. It flew over dunes, some frozen in time, some moving like for the future and some in reverse. It was confused by all this, and it wanted to leave. It saw even more creatures like the one that was attacking it.

It quickly flew over, leaving the twilight and entering complete darkness. The only source of light in the landscape it has found was the fire that let it fly. It was afraid of every single sound, expecting to be killed any second. It stopped, and the light went out. It was more tired than afraid. A sudden sound woke it up, it felt nibbling on its leg. It could not se anything it this eternal darkness, it didn't even think of flying. But because of the fear, it was shivering and that was enough to reveal the dull landscape. It thought that it saw something move, but it thought it was nothing. As it calmed down, the shivering stopped and the nibbling began once again. This time, it began flapping its wings suddenly, and that revealed over fifty centipedes going back to the shadows and the ones that were close started screaming it their last pain and died.

It was scared and went up, up as far up as it could. It arrived into space. It saw nothing but stars. It felt lonely. Soon, it saw another being just like itself. It flew towards the creature, and the creature flew towards it. They met and gestured each other. It saw an asteroid coming towards them and jumped to save its new friend, and the creature jumped towards it. It closed its eyes, prepared for a collision... And nothing happened. It just went trough what he thought was a creature like itself. It now realized, that it's new friend wasn’t anything more than a reflection, perhaps from another dimension.

It flew away, freaked out from the meeting and landed in a weird landscape. It has known, that it was near the place where the centipedes attacked it, since it was in the weird twilight it known prom it's previous journeys. It landed to rest. The ground was hot, even for it, a creature of fire, but when it looked down it saw ice. It quickly walked away from that weird spot and rested where was cool enough for it to stay. It woke up realizing that it's stuck. The ground it was previously sleeping on was now a liquid. Strange creatures were surrounding him, obviously first time they saw such a creature. It tried to fly, but it was stuck. When the creatures surrounding it saw that, they started pulling it out of the ground.

So it gratefully flew away, towards its unknown goal. It flew over a sickingly gray-greenish landscape, where it saw movement, but sensed no life at all. It landed on a round rock, to drink the lavafolw, it hasn't drunk in days. When it looked up from its object of interest, it saw that what it thought was a landscape, were moldy bones. It looked at the rock it was standing on, and saw two un-dead eyes gazing at it. It felt that he must not stay here, or it will die. But it was a long trip and it was still thirsty.

It drank a bit more and flew over bones of dead creatures to a place, it could no longer fly. It felt like it was three times heavier. It could barely walk, let alone fly. It was lucky that the terrain around it was the same color as its skin; otherwise one of the many creatures it has seen would have killed him, for they were all bigger than any other it has ever seen.

It walked for days in this hell, but finally made it to a rocky landscape where gravity was back to normal. The landscape here was dry and lifeless, so it didn't have any interest to descend. But the second sun has taken its toll and its little body was overheating. It needed a cool place to stay for a while. So it descended down, chose one of the many caves and went to rest inside. It woke up with the sound similar to the one it heard when he encountered the centipedes and started flapping it's wings to make light. It saw that it was a completely different creature. Not an aggressive creature of darkness, but a friendlier creature of earth. It had no reason to attack, so it left the cave to continue its journey.

It flew over the sun scorched lands and saw a green landscape and with curiosity descended down. It tried to land on a green, oval rock, seemingly floating above the others but fell down as the rock moved aside with a gust of wind. It realized that the rock was a part of a different structure. It heard something that seemed relaxing, until some of the same substance it encountered when it first left its home touched it. It was cold, scared and agitated, so it tried to get as far away as possible.

It came out of the scary green environment and found itself back home. Some other beings just like it were coming out of their shells, just like it did. As it saw the others it realized what it is. A Brimstone Eater, a part of a community where everyone did their job and everyone was happy.


PS:Yes, I know that Birmstone Eaters can't fly, but there is a first time for everything.

Anyways, I'm thinking about posting a several chapter story later, but I'm gonna save the stories (individual chapters) for competitions like this one.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108466#msg108466
« Reply #2 on: July 05, 2010, 08:07:23 pm »
Hmm, this will take a lot of work.  I think I'll submit my story near the end...

Maybe I'll edit in some brainstorming.

Well, I've been working on that school idea, it's pretty cool... but that would scratch out sci-fi for genre, the school is more realistic fiction/fantasy.  That'll force either mystery or romance.  Writing romance stories normally means "chick flick", or something similar, so if I go with romance I'll probably write that in as things go on.  If I'm going to keep romance available, I guess I'll leave all my characters asexual to start, and assign some character traits later as I go on.  That means I'll have to give all the characters a name later... screw that!  I'll just wing the whole romance thing.

As far as mystery goes, that'll require forethought.  And a LOT of it.  A mystery at school would mean a lot of harry potter esque... I guess I could go with that.  It's a bit overdone and cliche, I'm not writing for Nickelodeon...

Screw the school idea.  Let's shake things up and go with sci-fi.  The sci-fi story I always wanted to write was a James Bond story with a space magnifying glass, but I'm not sure how outerspace fits with elements.... oh my god.  I've got it.  Ray Bradbury, thank you for being awesome.  Story starts now...


The discovery of Elements
Tom's suit beeped rhythmically, reminding him he was alive.  Not much else did.  The emptiness of space was daunting, and where he was, there were no stars.

There were no stars!

Tom flipped around, grabbing his stabilization tether for support.  Just where was he that there were no stars?  It was like all matter was concentrated on this solar system, and nothing else existed.  And staring into the abyss, that feeling of being dead returned.  There was no temperature, no feeling, no breeze like he was accustomed to on his barn back home in Tennessee.  No gravity meant there was no down, and no stars meant there was no up.

No stars.

His suit beeped again bringing him back down to Earth.  Well, not back down to Earth, he thought with a laugh, but it refocused him.  He used his radio again.

"If there is anyone out there," he said, repeating his call for help, "anyone out there at all, I have exited the anomaly, I have arrived somewhere in space.  Please respond, over."  But it wasn't really a call for help.  Not yet.  It hadn't really sunk in just how far from home Tom really was.  Only one thing was sinking in at this point.

No stars.

Tom whistled inside his helmet, creating a chord with it's rhythmic beat.  "Well," he thought, "this has to go somewhere".  He began climbing down the cable he was tethered to.

The climb was difficult at first, as the cable was twisted around his ankle, and he got caught more than once on the carbon nano-tube cord, who's physical properties were suddenly all over the map.  It began to have a fractal-esque design, like thousands of carbon snowflakes had been stacked on top of each other, in beautiful spiraling patterns that made absolutely no sense.  Running his fingers down the cable, Tom remembered that if his suit was punctured, he'd be dead, but somehow that didn't phase him.  "No stars..." he thought, and his suit beeped as though sharing in his contemplation.

The faint pull of gravity began to take hold.  Grasping on to his cable, Tom allowed his legs sling in front of him, so that it looked like he was straddling the cable and facing downward.  The wrap around his ankle caught again, and Tom found himself entangled.  He bent over himself, with his bottom half right-side up, but his body redoubled at his waist.  This awkward position only lasted for a second, as he fell backwards, so that his upper half was now the one that was right side up, and his head was aligned with his knees.  Moving as quickly as one can in such a clunky suit, Tom grabbed on to the rope again, inadvertently grabbing on to a section of the rope that was below his ankles, and leaving him thoroughly wrapped in the rope.  Quickly fixing his ankle tangle, Tom realized he was sitting on the rope.  The cable rose up from the planet in front of him, passed between his legs like he was sitting on it, and then rose up behind him.  Lifting his left leg up and over the tether, he suddenly found himself right side up and sliding down the rope again.

Looking up at the top of the rope, he saw that the cable was still caught in the strange anomaly that had brought him here.  He assumed that it was still connected to the other side.  His suit beeped once more, perhaps angry he had called it clunky earlier, or perhaps agreeing with his idea, and Tom threw one of his flares through the anomaly.  While it wouldn't light, it was a signal.  It was the flare that gave off yellow flames.  A tentative maybe.

To his surprise, the flare he received in return was a red flare.  "What danger," Tom thought, "could be on the safe side of the anomaly?"  But Tom's thoughts were misguided, as the anomaly itself was the danger, and it quickly collapsed.  The cable was no longer taught, and now that gravity was in effect, it would no longer prevent his free-fall.  And fall he did.

Now plummeting rapidly, Tom found himself descending through the lone planet's atmosphere.  Suddenly concerned with where the other end of the rope was, he had difficulty seeing as the air whipped past his visor.  Squinting to see, Tom stared at the landscape below him.  He was approaching a vast island in an apparently endless sea of water, and he could see glorious geography similar to the rock back home.  Vast shoots of lava shot from volcanoes in violent geysers, streaming down the mountainside in such extreme amounts that the island had to be growing on one side at a visible rate.  This volcanic activity had caused many mountains, and vast deserts stretched along the globe.  Glancing in a haphazard manner, Tom noticed jungles, caverns, and a strange land of pink rock way off to one side where he could barely see it.  He had just noticed a vast swamp when he fell through a cloud.  Wiping his helmet clean, Tom saw the next row of clouds had buildings upon them, like a society living in the sky.  Awestruck, Tom saw that the creatures there were staring at the end of his rope, and one of the children kicked it comically.  But he didn't have much time to look as he zipped past, falling just to the side realizing that the whiplash from the tether would surely kill him, especially in it's new strangely thorny shape.  Tom let go of his last remaining connection to the world he came from, and began to tumble in descent.  Slowly flipping, he found himself with his back downward, and his limbs and head floating lazily behind it.  It was in this position he hit the water.  And with that extremely forceful collision, he blacked out.  As they said it back home, he began to see stars.

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When Tom awoke, an angry wind blew across his face.

Wind blew across his face!

Tom sat up frantically, feeling his head.  Where was his helmet?!  He'd die without air!  Where were his gloves?!  His suit?  His radio... his......  where was he?

The angry wind blew across his face again.

Looking around, he was on a small island, stranded.  The natural foliage looked quite similar to the palm trees growing on the beaches back home, and Tom almost thought he was home, when he heard a voice.

Someone giggled.

The voice was carried on the angry wind, so Tom had no idea how far this strange giggling person was away.  But after pausing to get a sample of the soil and water, before cataloguing the tree and taking a seed, Tom had forgotten about the strange giggle.

Until the wind blew again, angrier.  And the giggle was carried on the wind again.

Concerned now, Tom looked about his tiny island.  It was more like a sand bar caused by rocky terrain nearby, so the island was tiny.  There was no seismic activity that could be detected.  As far as Tom could tell, the island had been formed because the submerged mountains caused a quiet spot in the ocean where this island was, and though the mountains were long gone, somehow the sandbar stayed.

The wind furiously tried to destroy the island.  Or was it trying to destroy Tom?  And why was the wind giggling?

And that's when Tom saw her.  Floating above the water not too far away from him was a beautiful woman, with streaming locks of hair that sparkled as the wind blew.  But the wind didn't blow around her.  No... she was causing the wind to blow!  And with a grin filled with a double row of sharp teeth, the strange woman hissed at Tom ferociously before lighting a match. 

The large explosion nearly killed him.

Now blown far into the water, Tom would have bled out if the fire had cauterized his wounds instantly.  Still, he had severe burns on his stomach and arms, and several chunks of skin were missing from when his leg had hit the tree.  And far away, by the island, the strange woman burst into hysterical bouts of laughter.

A joyful wind blew across Tom's face, and he could hear the sound of her laughter dying down.  But Tom knew what the wind meant around here.  And he was scared to death of it.

He painfully did the backstroke towards the woman, trying not to cause too much exertion, but she playfully flew away, annoyed he'd escaped her pocket of flammable air.  Tricking her, he navigated so that the island was between the two of them.  When she lit the match, the gas hadn't quite made it to Tom, and instead of blowing backward, both of them were sucked in by the undertow of air and water.  Once cool air had replaced the warm air from the fire, and water had replaced the now combusted island, the floating woman found Tom right up close to her.  And so, with great difficulty, he grabbed her ankle.  She hissed and barred her teeth again, preparing to strike, but Tom was too quick for her, burying a needle into her leg. 

The sedative worked wonders. 

Examining the strange woman, he saw that she was humanoid except for her neck, which had extra holes for exhaling a strange chemical.  Tom placed a teleportation pad on the small of her back where she wouldn't feel it or be able to reach it, and then looked for land once more.  What he saw made him even happier.

His rope.

Draping the unconscious body on the trunk of the alien palm tree, Tom swam towards his rope to safety.  Exhausted from his wounds, Tom grabbed onto the rope to start climbing.  But he found he couldn't pull himself up and fell instantly.  He tried again, tugging once more, but failed.  He then tugged the rope twice, to check his handhold, when the rope started lifting itself.  Tom climbed just high enough to wrap his legs around the cable, and waited to reach the city in the clouds.  Below him, he heard the faint giggle of his lovely flying friend, before hearing a tremendous roar at his feet.

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Tom arrived at the city in the clouds after a half hour of floating.  He'd been pulled up by thousands of airborne insects, about the size of his torso.  They seemed to be receiving signals from their leader, who had a bioluminescent abdomen.  Staring at the wonderful creatures, Tom realized that they all had bioluminescent abdomens, but their leader's light was caused by a small flame inside them, instead of a strange chemical reaction.  The creatures seemed to hesitate when the heard the roar from below, but they pulled anyway.  Eventually they carried Tom to the top, where a humongous flying antlike being greeted him.

This new insect was about twice the size of Tom, looking far sturdier than anything he'd encountered so far.  It clacked it's pincers rapidly, and Tom's rescuers flew away.  To Tom's surprise, the ant being spoke.

"You are not the nymph!" it barked.

"I'm sorry?" Tom said.

"The nymph!  The one sent to kill you"

"Well, I'm sorry to have disappointed you..." Tom said wryly, "but I'm afraid I'm still alive."

"Hmph!" snorted the firefly's supreme leader.  "I can see that.  This is no good!  You may not stay here!  You must go!  Go!  Back to where you come from!  Up there!  Go back!  We do not want you here!"

"I'm afraid I don't know how to get back.  This strange portal opened in the sky, and I fell..."

"My queen..." said the firebutt who'd carried Tom upward, "there are three theories about the intruders origin.  Some believe he is a fallen angel, or perhaps a strange aetherian man who portaled out of confusion.  It has been suggested he be sent to the aetherian temples to get this sorted out...."

"No good!" said the firefly queen.  "Entropy!"  And with that, strange flying beasts grabbed Tom by his arms and flung him off the cloud.

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Tumbling downward to his doom, Tom saw he was flung towards the pink rock he had seen from afar.  And, to his horror, he saw he was going to be rescued.  By another nymph.

Panicking, he saw the strange pink nymph grab him.

"There there ma boy," it said, "Mommy's here now."  It then promptly kissed him.

Startled, Tom shoved her away.

"But Mommy!" said the nymph, "I want to PLAY!!!"  She shrieked the last word, beginning to cry.  But as quickly as the crying began, it ended, and the nymph dove towards the ground, pounding Tom into the surprisingly soft soil.  But the nymph's mood swings struck again, when it shouted "Stay here, I'll protect you!" before kicking Tom in the groin and flying away oblivious to him.

Tom was very confused.

He was even more so when several large wolf creatures charged toward him.  They were foaming at the mouth as though rabid, and they looked albino, like a thick layer of pink skin covered their whole body.  And when they reached Tom, he heard a fierce shriek from his Nymph friend, and the wolves promptly began tending to his wounds.  "Away with you!" shouted the first sane voice Tom had heard on this planet, and quickly the strange pink beings walked, or flew, away.  A man dressed as a gladiator in cyan robes peered down at Tom, smiling.

Tom realized he was insane.

"No no!" said the warrior, "you aren't insane.  Let's get you home."  The warrior lifted Tom up and started sprinting towards the sound of buffeting wind, way in the distance. 

It was a strange pink portal, occasionally closing and opening, causing the buffeting sound.  The being set Tom by the portal, smiled once more, and handed Tom back the teleportation pad he had discretely placed upon the warrior's back.  Not knowing what he was doing, Tom walked into the portal.

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"TOM!" cried his shipmates, running over and hugging him, for he was mysteriously back on the ship.  "Are you okay?!" one asked.

"Errr, yea, I guess.  That was the weirdest thing that ever happened to me."

"Did you get any data?" asked one of them, excited.

"Yea, loads, it's all right... here?"  Tom felt his suit, which was now empty of his samples.  The teleportation module said no pads were calibrated.  In fact, he found all of his pads back in his suit.

"I... I guess not."  Tom said, slipping his thumbs between his thighs and belt.  "But I've got all kinds of things to tell you.  And... you guys will think I'm crazy, but I've got the strangest idea for a card game..."

Fin.


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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108538#msg108538
« Reply #3 on: July 05, 2010, 09:44:59 pm »
Mystery: Never tried before, will most likely fail on first attempt.

Romance: It will end up really lame and cliche.

Sci-fi: I'm a high school student, so that kinda puts me on a disadvantage against those of you with PhDs in biochemistry or something.

So yeah... I'm gonna pass on this one. I've got my Elements Fanfiction to work on anyways.
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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108649#msg108649
« Reply #4 on: July 06, 2010, 12:37:19 am »
Is it possible to 'mix' the genres provided? For example, I'd like to do a possible Sci-fi with a little bit of mystery involved, but if I only get to select one, then that would make my idea a little bit difficult to accomplish. ^^;

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108881#msg108881
« Reply #5 on: July 06, 2010, 07:31:09 am »
Is it possible to 'mix' the genres provided? For example, I'd like to do a possible Sci-fi with a little bit of mystery involved, but if I only get to select one, then that would make my idea a little bit difficult to accomplish. ^^;
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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108900#msg108900
« Reply #6 on: July 06, 2010, 08:45:29 am »
Romance? That's going to be a bit...weird "And the Fallen Elf finally got it's dream of getting with the Archangel." :P

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg108913#msg108913
« Reply #7 on: July 06, 2010, 09:14:13 am »
Romance? That's going to be a bit...weird "And the Fallen Elf finally got it's dream of getting with the Archangel." :P

I'll Probably do Sci-Fi when I find the time
I would write a story about the love-life of an Otyugh living in New York. He just cannot seem to find the right girl, and when he does, he eats them.

I would call it: "Hungry in the City".

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg109354#msg109354
« Reply #8 on: July 06, 2010, 10:20:34 pm »
Is thinly veiled innuendo allowed?

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« Reply #9 on: July 06, 2010, 11:19:21 pm »
Is thinly veiled innuendo allowed?
Sure.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg109630#msg109630
« Reply #10 on: July 07, 2010, 06:48:03 am »
<Withdrew self from competition>
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Re: Elements Short Story Competition (mystery/Sci-fi/romance) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=9201.msg109640#msg109640
« Reply #11 on: July 07, 2010, 07:12:06 am »
Well, that's it for now. It's pretty much finished, but I may edit it later on.   931 words incase you're interested :P

(oh, and incase you were wondering, yes, Simon is SLIGHTLY sexually attracted to light :P )

Simon's Story
Simon was a Rustler. Every day was the same for him. Wake up, photosynthesise, go for a walk, photosynthesise, go back to sleep. He had no friends, but he didn't need them, he was content with his solitary life. There was only one problem with his life: the scarabs. They were cowards, afraid to attack on their own, but when they were in a group, they bullied him, pulling on his leaves, biting his tail, and so forth. That was, until the fateful day.

One day, when out on his daily walk, a bright light seemed to appear out of nowhere. Now usually, Simon would have ignored this and continued walking. But there was something odd about this light. It seemed to draw him towards it. As he got closer, he realised all the trees and objects around him were becoming bioluminescent, even the dragonflies were now flying around with glowing tails. As Simon got closer to the source, he realised that his leaves were sucking in the light without him even willing them to. As they did, he felt pure power surging around his body. What could this be?

As he advanced further, the light started receding. There was definitely something inside the light, a humanoid figure, appearing to manipulate the light, extending, shaping, channelling it.
"Hey!" shouted Simon, hopefully trying to grab it's attention, "Hey you!"
The being seemed to take no notice. It just floated there, manipulating the light.
"HEY!" yelled Simon, and he picked up a stone and threw it at her. It wasn't a very hard throw, but all of a sudden, all hell broke loose. The figure started screaming, and the light surrounding it seemed to be absorbed back into its body, before exploding outwards, knocking poor Simon off his feet. The figure was still screaming.
"Hang on!" shouted Simon, as he struggled to make his way towards the figure. It took every ounce of his strength, but he eventually got there, and touched his leaf against the figure. She immediately stopped screaming, and fell to the floor, with an ominous glow around her.
"Are you ok?" Simon asked.
"Yeah, I'm good. Thanks for that, I would have died if I had stayed like that for much longer"
"No problem" said Simon, who appeared to be blushing. There was also a strange feeling running through him, a nicer feeling than anything he had ever experienced. "So who are you?"
"I'm Eleanor, a Light Nymph from The Realm."
"Whoa, a Nymph? No seriously, a real Nymph?"
"Yes. Now I need to go, there's plenty for me to do. Thank you... what was your name again?"
"Oh, it's Simon."
"Bye Simon."
Simon didn't sleep well that night. The thought of Eleanor kept running through his mind, her beautiful face, her lovely voice, the light she emitted. She seemed perfect, why did she have to go?

The next day, Simon grudgingly got up, and went to the usual spot where he photosynthesises. When he got there, to his dismay, there were Scarabs leering at him. But it wasn't just Scarabs. For behind them, was a huge creature that seemed to be making more Scarabs as he watched. Simon sighed, and turned around to find another spot to get his energy, when he found his escape route blocked by more Scarabs. One of them advanced.
"Nowhere to run, eh? Trying to coward out. Well lemmie tell you something. You aren't getting away this time. Brothers, it's time to feast!"
And then they were upon him, attacking all parts of him. One was biting his foot, another scratching his face. Soon, you couldn't see him under a horde of green bugs. He was in agony, one of his leaves was ripped to shreds. He began to give up hope, he wasn't going to survive this. Anything could be better than it. A light began to bathe the area, covering all.
"And that's an Archangel coming to take me to heaven..." he thought. Suddenly though, the Scarabs were backing off, looking up at something in the sky. Simon looked up too, and  saw the most beautiful sight of his life. 12 beautiful beings, lead by Eleanor, the White nymph. And all were looking particularly angry at the Scarabs.
"You think you can attack this poor Rustler, after he has done nothing to you?" bellowed a stony brown nymph.
"Maybe we should teach you a lesson" shouted a watery blue one. She raised her arms, and it started raining. Heavily. The ground was quickly covered, and rose quickly. Soon, the Scarabs were struggling to swim. One of them jumped up to take a bite out of one of them, but was burned up by a red nymph. The Pharaoh leader tried to throw a punch at one of them, but in mid punch, he started decaying, and died. Soon, no more Scarabs were attacking, they were struggling to survive.
"We will let you live on one condition. You leave Simon alone." bellowed .
"Wha-whatever. Please, let us go!" cried the Scarab who initially challenged Simon. And at a wave of the Watery Nymphs hand, the waters receded. Immediately, the Scarabs ran off into the surrounding woods.
"Guys, you - you saved me..."
"It was Eleanor's idea," said a Purple coloured nymph. "She sensed your troubles, and sent off to help you. Naturally, we followed suit.
"Simon, I know we only met yesterday, but...." She then burst into tears and went down to hug Simon. Suddenly, he was bathed in a light. Not normal light, and not like the light from yesterday. He could feel is tail growing, his leaved extending, his bill lengthening. He was no longer a Rustler.

He was a Leaf Dragon. The Light Nymph floated down.
"I never should have left you. I will stay by you forever."

And that she did.

On the way home, they were both eaten by a grue :P

 

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