Even though I like the pulvy version more, the other one seems to work much better.
The reason can be easily explained with the QI:
QI of first deck: 4.8
QI of pulvy deck: 7.6
Each game I played with the pulvy one, I ended up with always 2 dragons stuck in hand and no quanta to ever play them.
Replacing one dragon with a pillar improves the QI to 6.24
Or the better option: replace the shields with pillars: QI=5.93, which is ~acceptable and leads to this deck:
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58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58o 58r 58r 58r 58r 58r 58r 58v 58v 595 595 595 595 595 595 5aa 5aa 5aa 5aa 5aa 8pl