May I start by saying my speech was DAMN fine, thank you!
No it wasn't.
Repeat:
Load Air. Read. Load Life. Compare.
Until: You realize that you have been outclassed and it's not fair for you to win.
Seriously? I mean, I admit air's speech was just as good, but I think our speech had some elements it was lacking.
And what would you say it is lacking?
Between Pervepic's knowledge of air and specific card related ideas, my putting these together and forming a stucture (3 A's, 1 para each, then 3 D's for the last paragraph), and Demagog's corrections, and suggestion to put an upbeat ending, I think we covered pretty much everything.
Looking at it now, the only thing I think is really missing is a short sharp line, not overly ofrced that does with the element and the general 'we will win' idea, like "The age of Ferocity has begun" (One hasn't occured to me right now, but I'll keep it in mind for next time)
And thanks Zeru for your praise