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Lonely Poems... https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=48580.msg1061018#msg1061018
« on: April 17, 2013, 11:36:24 pm »
I am Lonely
Just as a huge tree occupies a vast plain

Like the lone pup without his mother
I am so lonely


Just as a man walks at the end of the road
Like the polar bear without his ice
I am so lonely



Just as an Albatross has nowhere to flee

Like a teacher without his class
I am so lonely


I am so lonely…
 so lonely…. so lonely……


Alone Yet Crowded
Alone is the world I stand in,
yet crowded all around.
The people run by,
yelling and shouting,
crying and laughing,
and having a good time.
I always tune in to what they say.
However, what they say is often,
hard to hear or even understand.
Yet I remain still, alone, and crowded,
seeing the world flash by,
listening to its unintelligible words,
as I am alone yet crowded.


The Homeless Man
He strolls down forty-second street,
and yet no one is to be found.
He feels so alone,
and has no one there.
He can’t hold on to your hand,
for your hand is not there.
He reaches out with the kindness,
yet receives only the sadness,
from those he loves so.
The homeless man is alone on his stroll.

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Re: Lonely Poems... https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=48580.msg1061058#msg1061058
« Reply #1 on: April 18, 2013, 01:14:17 am »
 :-[   Sad

But pretty good overall. A few odd choices for imagery in the first poem, but they work
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Re: Lonely Poems... https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=48580.msg1061204#msg1061204
« Reply #2 on: April 18, 2013, 12:42:02 pm »
Not really into poems but the last one is actually a true story.
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Re: Lonely Poems... https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=48580.msg1061244#msg1061244
« Reply #3 on: April 18, 2013, 03:05:57 pm »
Sad but lovely. :'( :)
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Re: Lonely Poems... https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=48580.msg1061440#msg1061440
« Reply #4 on: April 19, 2013, 02:03:22 am »
Sad but lovely. :'( :)
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