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Big pack of rewording https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=20517.msg260477#msg260477
« on: January 30, 2011, 01:06:53 pm »
Wording
Voodoo doll :
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If Voodoo Doll survives an attack, damage and status are applied to your opponent. Damage is retroactive.

Lobotomizer
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 :aether :aether : remove active skill from the target creature.

Lightning
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Deal 5 damage to the target.

Parallel Universe
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Generate an exact copy of the target creature.

Unstable Gas
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 :fire : Ignite (Sacrifice card) Inflict 20 damage to your opponent and 1 damage to every creature on the field.

Wyrm
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Double the attack power of the Wyrm for 1 turn.

Thunderstorm:
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Deal 1 damage to every opponent's creature.

Shockwave:
Deal 4 to the target creature. Instantly kill the creature if it's frozen.

Blue Nymph
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Generate an Unstable Gas.

Wings
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Shield: Only "airborne" creatures and ranged weapons can harm you. Lasts 5 turns.

Devourer
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Absorb 1 random quantum from your opponent and generate  :darkness each turn.

Parasite
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Inflict 1 damage to the target creature each turn.

Steal
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Steal the target permanent.


Fire/Ice Bolt, Drain Life
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Deal 3 damage to the target for each  :fire in your possesion.
Drain 2 HP's from the target creature for each 10  :darkness in your possesion.

Reverse Time
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Put the target creature to the top of the owner's deck.

Procrastination
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Shield: Any creature that harmed you, is stuck in a time bubble for 1 turn.

Deja Vu
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Generate an exact copy of the Deja Vu. Can be used only once.

Fate Egg
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Turn the Fate Egg into a random creature.

Owl's Eye
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 :air :air: Deal 3 damage to the target creature.

Virus
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Infect (Sacrifice Virus):
Inflict 1 damage to the target creature each turn.


And capitalize a first letter in the first word in the sentences
And add dots to the ends of the sentences
and there are more and more cards.



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Re: Big pack of of rewording https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=20517.msg260541#msg260541
« Reply #1 on: January 30, 2011, 03:24:32 pm »
Firstly, rename the title to: Big pack of rewording

Secondly, I don't quite agree with the following corrections:
Wording
Parasite
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Inflict 1 damage to the target creature each turn.

Virus
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Infect (Sacrifice Virus):
Inflict 1 damage to the target creature each turn.
They don't inflict 1 damage to the target. I'd write it as:

Apply 1 Infection counter on target creature.

That is all.
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Re: Big pack of of rewording https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=20517.msg260616#msg260616
« Reply #2 on: January 30, 2011, 05:11:27 pm »
Very nice Thalas! I agree with several... but some justification on a lot of these would be nice.  I mean I'm sure you have good reason, but I'm not a grammar god apparently.

Like... what's wrong with Parallel Universe?

and then there's others like Steal.  I mean is it necessary to change?

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Re: Big pack of of rewording https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=20517.msg260627#msg260627
« Reply #3 on: January 30, 2011, 05:36:05 pm »
They don't inflict 1 damage to the target. I'd write it as:

Apply 1 Infection counter on target creature.

That is all.

I wanted changed it to :
Inflict 1 poison to the target creature, which deals to it 1 damage per turn
But it's too big

Like... what's wrong with Parallel Universe?

and then there's others like Steal.  I mean is it necessary to change?
Well nothing's wrong with paralllel universe, I just wanted to  change everything to same word.
Create, Summon = generate

No it isn't necessary, but it's good to have old cards little reworked. And it isn't so hard to change the text.

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Re: Big pack of rewording https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=20517.msg260635#msg260635
« Reply #4 on: January 30, 2011, 05:45:04 pm »
Ah yes standardizing tenses and words in the card vocabulary is justifying enough.  Like.

 

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