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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg124455#msg124455
« Reply #12 on: July 26, 2010, 12:49:50 am »
It begins, like all stories, once upon a time, long ago, in a land far far away. There was a castle, high up on a mountain. In this castle lived a family of a mother, a father, one son, (Aged 17) and one daughter (Aged 16) who were all arrogant and ignorant, careless of everything and especially hated each other. But apart from the family, someone else was living in the castle. A servant. Tall and charming, trusty and loyal, but with a motive. The motive? To get rid of the family out of the castle, for his and his people's good, since the father was the king, or shall I say, a tyrant. A slavedriver. He was an awful king that made everyone pay extra taxes, take away a bit of their daily crop harvests, laughed at misfortunes, stole from the poor and the rich, and drunk enough ale to fill up the pacific ocean annually. So, the servant started plotting against the tyrant, with the help of a wise elder living in the citadel somewhere off north.
It begins, unlike all stories, upon the night of the servants plot.  And as he dons his mask and arms himself, he prepares to commit treason and risk everything he has worked for in his life.  Little did he know he'd be risking so much more. For the family had always been suspicious of this servant, aware that he did not fully accept the king's rule. Even as he was plotting against them, the family - in their infinite deviousness - was plotting against him.

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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg124647#msg124647
« Reply #13 on: July 26, 2010, 09:42:49 am »
It begins, like all stories, once upon a time, long ago, in a land far far away. There was a castle, high up on a mountain. In this castle lived a family of a mother, a father, one son, (Aged 17) and one daughter (Aged 16) who were all arrogant and ignorant, careless of everything and especially hated each other. But apart from the family, someone else was living in the castle. A servant. Tall and charming, trusty and loyal, but with a motive. The motive? To get rid of the family out of the castle, for his and his people's good, since the father was the king, or shall I say, a tyrant. A slavedriver. He was an awful king that made everyone pay extra taxes, take away a bit of their daily crop harvests, laughed at misfortunes, stole from the poor and the rich, and drunk enough ale to fill up the pacific ocean annually. So, the servant started plotting against the tyrant, with the help of a wise elder living in the citadel somewhere off north.
It begins, unlike all stories, upon the night of the servants plot.  And as he dons his mask and arms himself, he prepares to commit treason and risk everything he has worked for in his life.  Little did he know he'd be risking so much more. For the family had always been suspicious of this servant, aware that he did not fully accept the king's rule. Even as he was plotting against them, the family - in their infinite deviousness - was plotting against him.

Their plot against him began way back, while he was just a young servant serving under them, he was also a good friend of the prince. This was back in the year of ....

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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg124719#msg124719
« Reply #14 on: July 26, 2010, 02:18:13 pm »
It begins, like all stories, once upon a time, long ago, in a land far far away. There was a castle, high up on a mountain. In this castle lived a family of a mother, a father, one son, (Aged 17) and one daughter (Aged 16) who were all arrogant and ignorant, careless of everything and especially hated each other. But apart from the family, someone else was living in the castle. A servant. Tall and charming, trusty and loyal, but with a motive. The motive? To get rid of the family out of the castle, for his and his people's good, since the father was the king, or shall I say, a tyrant. A slavedriver. He was an awful king that made everyone pay extra taxes, take away a bit of their daily crop harvests, laughed at misfortunes, stole from the poor and the rich, and drunk enough ale to fill up the pacific ocean annually. So, the servant started plotting against the tyrant, with the help of a wise elder living in the citadel somewhere off north.
It begins, unlike all stories, upon the night of the servants plot.  And as he dons his mask and arms himself, he prepares to commit treason and risk everything he has worked for in his life.  Little did he know he'd be risking so much more. For the family had always been suspicious of this servant, aware that he did not fully accept the king's rule. Even as he was plotting against them, the family - in their infinite deviousness - was plotting against him.

Their plot against him began way back, while he was just a young servant serving under them, he was also a good friend of the prince. This was back in the year of 1337 AD where the prince once got into a feud with a band of rustlers. The prince started to physically attack them, little he knew that he had no chance. After the prince was beaten mercilessly, much to the servant's delight, the servant couldn't help more to watch. He called the knights, and the knights got the rustlers burned in oil. Thus the prince remained owed to the servant.

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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg124775#msg124775
« Reply #15 on: July 26, 2010, 03:53:51 pm »
Requesting the last one with a slight change of grammar or english! Nice year btw xD

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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg124776#msg124776
« Reply #16 on: July 26, 2010, 03:57:47 pm »
Fix'd  ;)

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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg124784#msg124784
« Reply #17 on: July 26, 2010, 04:12:37 pm »
It begins, like all stories, once upon a time, long ago, in a land far far away. There was a castle, high up on a mountain. In this castle lived a family of a mother, a father, one son, (Aged 17) and one daughter (Aged 16) who were all arrogant and ignorant, careless of everything and especially hated each other. But apart from the family, someone else was living in the castle. A servant. Tall and charming, trusty and loyal, but with a motive. The motive? To get rid of the family out of the castle, for his and his people's good, since the father was the king, or shall I say, a tyrant. A slavedriver. He was an awful king that made everyone pay extra taxes, take away a bit of their daily crop harvests, laughed at misfortunes, stole from the poor and the rich, and drunk enough ale to fill up the pacific ocean annually. So, the servant started plotting against the tyrant, with the help of a wise elder living in the citadel somewhere off north.
It begins, unlike all stories, upon the night of the servants plot.  And as he dons his mask and arms himself, he prepares to commit treason and risk everything he has worked for in his life.  Little did he know he'd be risking so much more. For the family had always been suspicious of this servant, aware that he did not fully accept the king's rule. Even as he was plotting against them, the family - in their infinite deviousness - was plotting against him.

Their plot against him began way back, while he was just a young servant serving under them, he was also a good friend of the prince. This was back in the year of 1337 AD where the prince once got into a feud with a band of rustlers. The prince started to physically attack them, little did he know that he had no chance of winning. After the prince was beaten mercilessly, much to the servant's delight, the servant couldn't help to watch anymore. He called the knights, and the knight's got the rustlers burned in oil. Thus the prince remained indebted to the servant.
The prince, however, did not like being indebted to the servant, and began plotting on his own. He threatened the knight's that saved him, and told the king that is was the servant's doings. But that he held no grudge, because it was himself that had started. The clever ill-minded prince knew that this was all that was needed for the king to start plotting against the servant himself.

Wardead, I changed some lines, i bolded them, hope it was ok.
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Re: Never Ending Story by Retribution https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=10193.msg132776#msg132776
« Reply #18 on: August 07, 2010, 01:50:26 am »
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