Elements RPG! Part 4

[Helios]

"In that case, we shall lay Exriel to rest for the present. Do you know where you are? You are in the most beautiful and serene garden this World has to offer; Solraegiel thought it would be lovely to create one, though he was not responsible for its design. We shall turn to the most relevant section of the History, lest we remain here until winter passes and spring comes again. First, look at the Second Golden Age, our last period of true splendour, and the image of your father there; in the Age's 1500th Year, he accomplished something which I personally believe made others recognise his merit and thus enabled him to become the Archangel of War: the decisive victory at Tol Maluin against a substantially larger combined force of Hell's Demons and their corrupted Middle Plane followers. But if that event was a watershed moment in his rise, we must also regard his fall."

He turned to another page.

"I would like you to study with great attention the Last Golden Age, for to me it is the most significant, and then read upon the tales of the ends of not only your father, but Eldarael and Solraegiel himself, and thus how Heaven's time of prosperity and magnificence was forever ended.           

[$$$man]

Name- Zeni

Race-Human (chaos sorcerer)

Appearance- Zeni can mutate himself using the mutations spell to change forms but in his base form he is a human cloaked in a purple cloak. He has his staff of chaos with him at all times it changes as he does to disguise itself. He is a VERY friendly person and can make bonds with even the darkest personalities. He uses this and his mutating appearance to his advantage and infiltrates enemies.

Background- Zeni was born to a genius named Max and his wife Cynthia. Max is the leader of the Maxwell’s demons and had granted them the intelligence to find and eliminate paradoxes. Zeni learned of all his chaotic powers from Max. Max and Cynthia died at a strategy meeting; they were meeting with the fallen elves to discuss an attack to the FG of death Morte, who was threatening them. The elves betrayed the Chaomancers (Chaos Wizards) and mutated them until they died. Zeni being an established Chaomancer already had opened a portal to watch the outcome, when the betrayal began Zeni went through the portal to teleport there. He managed to save max but only after a fatal chaos seed had been cast, Max’s last words to Zeni were “You are a master you are the king of entropy; I imbue you with my Entropic powers. Go and avenge us by vanquishing the evil that caused these elves to attack us.” With that Zeni left and began wandering until he came upon a pact of Maxwell’s Demons. He joined with them and with his appearance changing spells they joined ranks in Morte’s undead army. Morte had his suspicions at first, but quickly grew friends with Zeni and promoted him through the ranks. Disguised as a nether lord he commands an army of demons disguised as reapers. They plan on destroying Morte whenever the opportunity presents itself.

Belongings- A robe and a staff, Also a pact of demons.

Abilities:

Chaos seed- Zeni casts a random negative effect on the target. This move hardly drains Zeni at all and can be used in quick succession for massive destruction. When used very many times it grows into a more powerful spell known as pandemonium, Which drains Zeni significantly but targets almost all enemies, Pandemonium casts the same effect on all foes affected.

Mutation- Zeni mutates target creature. It dies, turns into something weird, or becomes an abomination. This ability can be controlled to change a creature’s appearance.

Master form- When Max died he told Zeni that he was a master. Zeni can now transform into a Half-master and whoop ass. This ability drains Zeni very immensely and nearly kills him if used to long.

Entropic control- Years of studying with the Demons granted Zeni immense knowledge. He can use this knowledge to essentially mind control a weak minded enemy the stronger the mind of the enemy the more difficult to enter and control.

Dissipation Shield- Zeni generates a massive shield that shields him and others. This ability drains Zeni depending on how much damage it defends against.

 For example
One golem’s punch-slight drain
A catapult attack-significant drain
FG attack-nearly knocks Zeni out.
Or in this case a bomb’s impact-significant drain.

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InC-

Zeni and the demons lay in wait disguised as ranks in Morte’s army when the angels began their attacks they would transform and destroy as many Reapers and Nether lords as possible. “BOOM” a bomb went off. Zeni instinctively cast a dissipation shield over his demons. The blast drained him extensively. They uncloaked from their fake forms and began attacking the other reapers. The sufficiently drained Zeni Cast an immediate pandemonium on Morte’s strongest. The nether lords and reapers surprised by this attack could do nothing as the bomb shattered their army and the pandemonium plagued their bodies. The angels although they had planned initially to stay back and let Morte attack now began their assault. Cleaving through Morte’s ranks, they watched as the coward tried to run. Zeni attempted to enter Morte’s mind. Bewildered as he was, Morte’s mind was very defensive nearly shocking Zeni by the immense Power. But the distraction was enough as Morte focused on closing his mind, the angels approached.
OoC
So how was it? Feedback is appreciated as this is my first non-death/darkness character.

[Sirenes]

In truth, Sirenes somehow had been too distracted by her tardiness to and too focused on her instructor to see the garden. She'd been looking forward to seeing it since it's mention and here she was not appreciating it. As it's brought to her attention, she glances around, eyes widening. It was discouraging to know that she had to forgo her exploration of it for now to study. There wasn't much chance of an angel understanding the impatience of a mortal. Frowning slightly, she opens the first book and locates the page on which she was to start. In fact, she had already read much of this book with no knowledge that she'd been reading about her father, for in this history he was recorded under another name. "Ambrael..." She murmurs softly, touching the drawing of her father, whom she'd spent quite a few moments examining before. She glances up from the pace, brow wrinkled slightly in confusion "If his name was Ambrael, why do you call him Lucius?"         

[$$$man]

Posted in the reserve.

[Bloodshadow]

the decisive victory at Tol Maluin against a substantially larger combined force of Hell's Demons and their corrupted Middle Plane followers.

That would be the Lesser Demons that were running amok in the Middle Plane before they were subdued, correct? True Demons had no intentions of conquering the Middle Plane.

$$$man: Good character, but there is one problem. Maxwell is the original Master of Entropy, who created the Maxwell's Demons. He died and reincarnated at the end of the Iron Age after the battle with the Void. Zeni's father would have to be a different Max, one that didn't create the Maxwell's Demons.

Master form- When Max died he told Zeni that he was a master. Zeni can now transform into a full-fledged master and whoop ass. This ability drains Zeni very immensely and nearly kills him if used to long.

LOL, you can turn into a full Master as soon as you joined? I smell h4x. I've been playing for such a long time now, and my character still can't achieve 100% Master form (the current 3-headed dragon form is 62.5%). In full Master form you'd be able to pwn Morte all by yourself, which would render this pointless. As far as I know, at the moment only Sekhor can use full Master form. I suggest you change this to a half-Master form, since full Master form is incredibly hard to achieve, and you definitely can't have it as soon as you join.

Also, I wouldn't try to probe Morte's mind like that. He's a FG, and there's always the chance that he might overwhelm you.

[$$$man]

the decisive victory at Tol Maluin against a substantially larger combined force of Hell's Demons and their corrupted Middle Plane followers.

That would be the Lesser Demons that were running amok in the Middle Plane before they were subdued, correct? True Demons had no intentions of conquering the Middle Plane.

$$$man: Good character, but there is one problem. Maxwell is the original Master of Entropy, who created the Maxwell's Demons. He died and reincarnated at the end of the Iron Age after the battle with the Void. Zeni's father would have to be a different Max, one that didn't create the Maxwell's Demons.

Master form- When Max died he told Zeni that he was a master. Zeni can now transform into a full-fledged master and whoop ass. This ability drains Zeni very immensely and nearly kills him if used to long.

LOL, you can turn into a full Master as soon as you joined? I smell h4x. I've been playing for such a long time now, and my character still can't achieve 100% Master form (the current 3-headed dragon form is 62.5%). In full Master form you'd be able to pwn Morte all by yourself, which would render this pointless. As far as I know, at the moment only Sekhor can use full Master form. I suggest you change this to a half-Master form, since full Master form is incredibly hard to achieve, and you definitely can't have it as soon as you join.

Also, I wouldn't try to probe Morte's mind like that. He's a FG, and there's always the chance that he might overwhelm you.

Alright rather than have him create them, I'll have him be a leader.
alright half-master, done.
and the FG thing zeni is pretty reckless ill keep him doing that. any problems with the InC post.

[Bloodshadow]

Just a suggestion: instead of making him reckless all the time, why not make him erratic and unpredictable? As though he has multiple split personalities or something?

[Glitch]

Ewwww no.  MPD is a horrible cliché overdone plot device.

Perhaps your character values originality over quality, and will chose the less popular option over the best option every time.

[Helios]

the decisive victory at Tol Maluin against a substantially larger combined force of Hell's Demons and their corrupted Middle Plane followers.

That would be the Lesser Demons that were running amok in the Middle Plane before they were subdued, correct? True Demons had no intentions of conquering the Middle Plane.

Not even Heaven is perfect; Hell would have naturally acted in their own interest when the opportunity presented itself to acquire more power; they succeeded to a substantial extent when Heaven completed its withdrawal at the end of the Last Golden Age.

[Bloodshadow]

A portion of the Demonic populace went to the Middle Plane to try to conquer it. However, staying on the Middle Plane for too long caused those Demons to devolve and become weaker, turning them into the Lesser Demons. The Demons that stayed in the Abyss (True Demons) had no intentions of conquering the Middle Plane, because they deem the Middle Plane to be unworthy as a living place for them.

Also, now I feel like establishing some sort of Demonic Council for the currently ruling True Demons in Hell. Editing.
NOTE: This is not an InC post.

The Abyss is a realm of Darkness populated by Demons, powerful shapeshifting immortal creatures. Demons are all mainly aligned to Darkness, but some of them have secondary elemental alignments. More powerful Demons in the Abyss are called Archdemons, while the seven Demon Lords rule the Abyss.

The seven Demon Lords are named after the Seven Deadly Sins, and they also have their own individual titles. They are as the following:

Pride: Lucifer, the Prince of Darkness
Lust: Lilith, the Seductress
Greed: Mammon, the Avaricious One
Envy: Leviathan, the Hell Serpent
Gluttony: Beelzebub, the Lord of Vermins
Wrath: Satan, the Destroyer
Sloth: Belphegor, the Shadow Bishop

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[$$$man]

Someone post InC

[Helios]

A portion of the Demonic populace went to the Middle Plane to try to conquer it. However, staying on the Middle Plane for too long caused those Demons to devolve and become weaker, turning them into the Lesser Demons. The Demons that stayed in the Abyss (True Demons) had no intentions of conquering the Middle Plane, because they deem the Middle Plane to be unworthy as a living place for them.

If only your Lesser Demons participated, they would definitely not have been powerful enough to defeat the allied forces of even a retreating Heaven and the Middle Plane.