Character's Name: Ragen Ignsignia
Element: Earth
Brief Description: Ragen was born with extreme strength, though people assumed he was dumb, Ragen was a bright person. Ragen was tall to fit his mucles, about 6 feet tall. Ragen's brown hair was fairly messy and short. Ragen has a strange mark on his shoulder that glows near his peoples sacred caves.
Story: Ragen had his parents died in a bandit raid , Ragen Vowed revenge on the bandit camp, and ever since devoted all his spare time to training with his mace or pounding a tree to a ground, too get a shield and Armour, Ragen worked partime at a blacksmith, this blacksmith eventually gave him a shield and Armour that could deflect most weapons right off. at 16 Ragen decided to waste no further time, he traveled to the bandit camp 3 days away from the village in the mountains. Finally Ragen reached the camp, but these bandits were fierce animal tamers, and had trained many wild shriekers, Ragen destroyed everything in the bandit camp, nothing left alive. Ever since Ragen had been protecting his land and stopping anything that threatens the village and continuing his training for any threat. Ever since, there has been no major attacks on the medium size town, Utrke. One day however, a small force of antilons formed nearby to the town, Ragen and a big portion of the army went to attack thus force, they were successful, but, a figure stand atop a hill, he wore black robes on the hill reaching over the village. The wizard summoned Meteors to strike the village, when Ragen's army returned, there was only dust, promising to eventually avenge the town of Utrke by slaying the wizard, they had no leads and decided to go to the capital of earth's country, Gaia, known for its sacred caves with the all powerful pulveriser.
Skills: 1. Earth Spikes: Ragen calls up spikes from the ground to pierce anything within 5 meters from the air or ground 2. Summoning : Ragen can summon shriekers and graboids burrowing through the ground to appear anywhere nearby, a major suprise attack. 3. earthquake: Ragen can smash the ground and leave nothing standing within 150 meters. 4.: stone skin, turns skin to stone which nothing can penetrate, lasts half an hour, strength increased, movement decreased.5. blood boil: blood boils and rips anything to shreds, freind and foe step away as Ragen will destroy everything in his path, uncontrollable but activated by will as a last resort.
Character's Name: Ragen Ignsignia
Element: Earth
Brief Description: Ragen was born with extreme strength, though people assumed he was dumb, Ragen was a bright person. Ragen was tall to fit his muscles, about 6 feet tall. Ragen's brown hair was fairly messy and short. Ragen *HAS* why the sudden present tense?* a strange mark on his shoulder that glows near his peoples sacred caves.
Story: *Ragen had his parents die in a bandit raid , Ragen *V*owed *Improper capital* revenge on the bandit camp, and ever since devoted all his spare time to training with his mace or pounding a tree to a ground, too get a shield and *A*rmour*Improper capital*, Ragen worked *PARTIME* *It's part time* at a blacksmith, this blacksmith eventually gave him a shield and *A*rmour*Improper capital* that could deflect most weapons right off.* *run on sentence* *a*t *lacking capital* 16 Ragen decided to waste no further time, he traveled to the bandit camp 3 days away from the village in the mountains. Finally Ragen reached the camp, *BUT* *improper use of conjunction* these bandits were fierce animal tamers, and had trained many wild *doesn't make sense* shriekers, Ragen destroyed everything in the bandit camp, *nothing left alive* *grammatical error*. *Ever since Ragen had been protecting his land and stopping anything that threatens the village and continuing his training for any threat. Ever since, there has been no major attacks *except the antlions and wizard of course* on the medium size town, Utrke.* *improper sentence structure* One day however, a small force of *antilons* *it's antlions* formed nearby to the town, Ragen and a big portion of the army went to attack *thus* *it's 'this'* force, they were successful, but*,* *improper use of comma* a figure *stand* *why the sudden present tense?* atop a hill, *he wore black robes on the hill* *what did he wear off the hill?* reaching over the village. *The wizard summoned *M*eteors *improper use of capital* to strike the village, when Ragen's army returned, there was only dust, promising to eventually avenge the town of Utrke by slaying the wizard, they had no leads and decided to go to the capital of earth's country, Gaia, known for its sacred caves with the all powerful pulveriser.* *run on sentence with poor grammar structure*
Skills: 1. Earth Spikes: Ragen calls up spikes from the ground to pierce anything within 5 meters *from* *of, not from* the air or ground 2. Summoning : Ragen can *someone* *it's summon* shriekers and graboids burrowing through the ground to appear anywhere nearby, a major *suprise* it's *surprise* attack. 3. earthquake: Ragen can smash the ground and leave nothing standing within *150 meters.* *also known as 492 feet, or 164 yards. Why is the world still standing?* 4.: stone skin, turns skin to stone which nothing can penetrate, lasts half an hour, strength increased, movement decreased.5. blood boil: *blood boils and rips anything to shreds* *who's blood, and why would boiling blood rip something?*, *freind* *it's friend* and foe step away as Ragen will destroy everything in his path, uncontrollable but activated by will as a last resort.
