just writing a little something on each story here
Little Odyssey
The grammar-fault, as miniwally pointed out, killed alot of fun for me, no offense. I'd recommend having someone correct it for you if possible =) It seemed like a grand idea, and many of the places were wery well-written, but in the long run, it was abit too repetive for my liking.
The discovery of Elements
I love the use of Major Tom =) And I thought it was really good, there is a part or two (sorry, cant specify more, middle of the night) that wasnt entirely to my liking, but there was just something about the introduction to this story that I loved! I was still waiting for more song-references
-I'd love a dispatch to majord tom: "you've really made the grade.." etc. But its a really good story!
+1 vote
Simon's Story
No need to write here, as Hobs knows all my sayings, fun story, good idea =)
The Women of Chaos
This, was a love-hate journey, I liked the story itself, until randomly j-dawg killed the golden nymph and chaos erupted. Also didnt care for the lack of detailed description, and the end seemed like a "ohno, deadlines coming up" type of ending. IE: killing someone off and wrap it up. I didnt care for J-dawgs death and that they then to actually put the drug on sale wthorse?
The Loneliest Otyugh on the Elemental Plane
This was again very repetive, but a fun read the entire way, it would make a great story for the younger elements player (if we got some under age of 10) but its fun and a cool concept =) I like the moral additions on the end! Sunny has some serious writing talent =) +1awesomecaek!
Love in the Abyss
This was also a cool story, and was between those I wanted to vote for. Im very interested in crime, but there was a few stuff that shouldve been there, abit more backstory on the doc maybe, and the characters themselves. But the ending was quite good, and the relationships was a good turn, quite interesting love story!
Luka
Luka luka luka! What to say! Such a good story, but the fact that i didnt even comprehend the accent kinda ruined stuff, skipping every other line. sorry.
From Twelve to Tears
Kuro-kuro-kuro! First of all, WHY SO FEW VOTES? This was by FAR my favorite story, I liked everything about it, EXCEPT the ending. It shouldve ended with the line
“Do not save her life. Give her a new one.” Imho, that would be a much stronger and open ending, and I'd give it both my votes xD And thus the ending paragraph would be:
Eric turned to the portal, then back at Tracey. “Would you be willing to leave this world for one that would welcome you?” Aririus gasped at Eric’s question, and shifted her eyes onto Tracey, who slowly nodded before shutting her eyes. As the world became quieter, Tracey heard a few words before falling into a deep sleep:
“Do not save her life. Give her a new one.”
So, well, really good story! =) +1vote.
