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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg371517#msg371517
« Reply #24 on: July 26, 2011, 02:06:15 am »
I'd like to reserve Gravity shield.
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I think the maximum word limit is too little. 1100 words is too short for even a shorty story. I suggest you raise the max word amount to at least 2000.
I'm slightly surprised about that since the last competition had a max limit of 1000 words and still got 25 entries, but if others find the limit too constraining I'll raise it.
I was still about 100 words away from finishing every part of the story. Had to condense like a BOSS.
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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg371522#msg371522
« Reply #25 on: July 26, 2011, 02:18:26 am »
Word range raised to 1000-2000.

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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg371528#msg371528
« Reply #26 on: July 26, 2011, 02:44:50 am »
I would like fog shield if I could. Please and thank you!! :)
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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg373092#msg373092
« Reply #27 on: July 29, 2011, 12:50:36 pm »
I'm going away for a week soon, so I better post mine now.


Hope was never an ordinary shield.
   When she was young, Hope’s parents were killed by an explosion. Hope survived, and baffled elementals everywhere.
    “You are destined for great things, Hope,” her parents had always told her. She had always believed them with the wide-eyed innocence of a child.
   Today though, she had trouble believing it. Seven years later, she was training to be a shield, but was unable to block any attacks whatsoever.
    “You will never be a proper shield,” her teacher had said. “You’ll be a relic at best.”
   Hope had turned and ran outside. She had stumbled, her vision blurred by tears, but still she ran on, the only thing on her mind getting as far away as possible. Finally she had collapsed onto the ground where she now lay, sobbing.
   Suddenly and strangely, she had the feeling that someone was watching her. She raised her head, wiping her eyes, and gasped.
   Floating above her head was a small, luminous ball. She stood up shakily and raised her trembling hand to it. The ball bounced away as she touched it, whizzing behind her. It was shining gently, and emitting faint light.
   “A ray of light,” said Hope, laughing at the silly name she had invented. She wiped the last of her tears away and stared at the ray of light. Suddenly some more rays appeared, and the air around them lit up as their collective light emission shone through the sky.
   A crashing sound alerted her and she jumped around wildly. A giant frog was bearing down on her. It croaked – an ear-splitting, terrifying sound – yet Hope wasn’t scared.
   Somehow the light emitted by the rays of light had given Hope courage, and she fearlessly faced down the frog.
   I’m going to die, said the logical part of herself. But her newfound courageous side took no notice. The frog’s tongue flicked out of its mouth, straight at Hope – and she blocked it.
   She was so surprised she nearly fell over. She had never been able to block an attack. The rays of light were somehow helping her!
   With these rays, not even the False Gods could harm me, she thought before she could stop herself.
   “I wouldn’t be so sure about that,” said a voice.
   The speaker could have been any lady elemental, except that her skin sparkled like diamonds. Her eyes were a burning crimson. Hope had seen pictures of her, but had never thought she would ever see this brutal tyrant in person …
   “Divine Glory,” gasped Hope.
   Divine Glory smiled. “So you really think that we Gods cannot harm you, mortal?”
   “No,” stammered Hope. “I’m sorry, that was just an arrant thought …”
   “If you keep thinking things like that, you’ll go the same way as your parents,” said Divine Glory.
   Hope froze. “What do you know about my parents?”
   Divine Glory laughed, a mirthless, terrifying laugh. “It was I who killed them!”
   Red filled Hope’s vision. Suddenly she didn’t care about the fact that Divine Glory could kill her in an instant – all she cared about was bringing her to justice. Hope ran at her.
   Red beams blasted from Divine Glory’s eyes. They hit the ground near Hope’s feet and created a huge explosion – yet somehow, the explosion passed right through her.
   Divine Glory raised her eyebrows. “Immaterial,” she spat.
   Hope had heard of the term before – some creatures and shields were born immaterial, unable to be harmed directly.
   Divine Glory pulled out a bright, shining sword and threw it into the air. It hovered, twisted itself around in the air, then flew straight at Hope, blade-first. Hope blocked the sword and sent it flying back to its mistress. Divine Glory gasped.
   “Hope!” called a voice. Hope and Divine Glory both spun around to see Firefly Queen, a girl from school, emerging from the bush. Divine Glory threw another sword into the air, and it flew at Firefly Queen.
   “NO!” yelled Hope, rushing forth and blocking the sword from hitting Firefly Queen. Firefly Queen summoned a swarm of fireflies, which overwhelmed Divine Glory. Divine Glory gave a scream, before shattering like glass. The pieces disintegrated, leaving nothing behind.
   “That was incredible!” exclaimed Firefly Queen. “You blocked all her attacks! You are literally the most powerful shield in the world!”
   The rays of lights whizzed joyously around Hope. Pride welled within her, complemented with satisfaction that she had avenged her parents.
   “This is dangerous,” said Firefly Queen nervously. “If the other False Gods find out about this, they won’t be pleased.
   “No, we won’t,” said a wheezy voice.
   The newcomer was clad in light blue, with the burning red eyes of Divine Glory. He held a long blue bow in one hand.
   “Octane,” whispered Firefly Queen to Hope.
   “Come on, Octane!” shouted Hope. “Try to hit me with your bow! See what happens!”
   Octane’s eyes narrowed. Slowly he produced a bright blue vial from his cloak. He opened it and a bright blue gas secreted from it. It filled the meadow, and Firefly Queen and Hope coughed on it.
   “So what, you’re going to choke us to death?” scoffed Hope.
   Octane smiled. That smile gave Hope the shivers.
   “Not exactly,” he said, then fire shot from his eyes and the gas exploded. All the rays of light hovering around Hope disappeared, casting darkness over the meadow.
   “NO!” cried Hope, falling to the ground as all her hope disappeared. The tears were back – how could she have been so stupid? She could never defeat the False Gods, and should never have tried.
   “Come on, Hope,” said Firefly Queen. “We can still do this.”
   “No we can’t,” whispered Hope. “Those rays of light were the only reason I could block everything. And now they’re gone.”
   Firefly Queen stared at her sadly. Then she began summoning fireflies.
   “Don’t bother,” moaned Hope. “We can’t defeat him.”
   “Yes we can,” whispered Firefly Queen.
   Hope looked up mournfully, then gasped.
The fireflies were glowing. They illuminated the meadow with light, filling the void left by the rays of light. Hope stood up, courage coming back to her, and together she and her new friend faced Octane.
   There was still hope.
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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg373120#msg373120
« Reply #28 on: July 29, 2011, 02:33:53 pm »
I'll reserve Skull Shield. :)

Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg373502#msg373502
« Reply #29 on: July 30, 2011, 06:18:41 am »
FYI I'm a bit behind on trials stuff, and haven't really thought of a specific story yet.

I plan on working on this, but I would hate to be taking Azure Dragon from anyone else, since there is a possibility that it will never be done.

(Good luck, I hope you win if you do)

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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg374301#msg374301
« Reply #30 on: August 01, 2011, 02:41:21 pm »
FYI I'm a bit behind on trials stuff, and haven't really thought of a specific story yet.

I plan on working on this, but I would hate to be taking Azure Dragon from anyone else, since there is a possibility that it will never be done.

(Good luck, I hope you win if you do)
I guess this means you're withdrawing your reservation for Azure Dragon, so I'll take it off.


Bump for 3 days left, only 3 or so stories were submitted. I know Trials got in the way so I might extend the comp a few days if needed.


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Word Limit now at 750-2000. Limit may be raised higher if more writers request so.

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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg374324#msg374324
« Reply #31 on: August 01, 2011, 04:26:59 pm »
I think I know who that writer is...cough*cough...
I think 2000 is enough, personally. But if there's only one person who goes over that, I'm fine with it.

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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg374372#msg374372
« Reply #32 on: August 01, 2011, 07:15:08 pm »
Let's try my hand on story-writing for once. :rainbow shield reserved!
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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg374561#msg374561
« Reply #33 on: August 02, 2011, 01:08:33 am »
Here we go, my turn...


     I planted the tip of my staff into the cliff and used it as leverage to lift myself up and then retrieved it. Stopping to take a breath, I thought about what had just happened. The Ruby Dragon had rushed into a small village I was visiting at the base of the mountain. He had brought with him two Lava Destroyers and many, many Brimstone Eaters. Too many Brimstone Eaters. I fought them off as best as I could, but I was eventually forced to run away so I could warn the villages at the top of the mountain about the incoming attack. I would have used the air to carry me up there, but I was so exhausted I couldn't even conjure up a breeze right now.
     Once I had caught my breath I continued on, climbing and struggling up the side. Soon I was about two thirds up the mountain I paused once again. This time I thought of Aeras, my soon to be bride. She was as graceful as the spring breeze, flowing in and out of the grass and flowers of the meadow. She was living up at the top of the mountain, at the top where our sculptors had created a mesa. The thought of her gave me the extra boost of strength I needed to continue on with my climb.
     As I neared the top I heard a scream. Aeras's scream. Rage filled me and I bounded the rest of the way to the top. My feet crunched into the rock as I landed on the mesa. Smoke drifted from every building. Debris had replaced the neighborhoods. Ash had taken over the beautiful plazas.
     The Ruby Dragon roared from the middle of the village, ash and flame spewing from his maw. His claws raked the air as he displayed his victory. The Ruby Dragon stood in the middle of what used to be a large, circular plaza on top of a fountain that was reduced to rubble. A Lava Destroyer appeared out of the dust and the smoke to my left, flanked by several Brimstone Eaters. The other Destroyer came up on my right, also flanked by Brimstone Eaters.
     The Dragon turned his attention on me, his eyes mere slits. My own eyes matched his. Fury filled me at the sight of the village in ruins. Adrenaline coursed through my veins. The Lava Destroyers gestured to their minions and they came rushing at me. Ten, fifteen, twenty of them. Now they were thirty. I couldn't take them all head on.
     I was hopelessly outmatched, and because of that, I was furious. I had been forced to run before, then I had found this place in ruins, and now there was no hope left for this place. The fury filled me and with a scream I let it out. But more than just sound escaped from my mouth. Fog poured from deep within me, the physical incarnation of my rage. Every now and then you could see lightning arcing across the fog.
     The Brimstone Eaters slowed to a halt as the fog got closer and closer to them. One of the Lava Destroyers called out, "What kind of trickery is this?" The Lava Destroyers and the Ruby Dragon physically recoiled when the fog touched them. I heard one of the Brimstone Eaters whimper from deep within the fog that now covered the entire village and was taller than the Ruby Dragon.
     Looking around me I found that I could see through the fog relatively well, while the others seemingly could not. Smiling to myself I dashed over to the nearest Brimstone Eater and smashed the side of its head with my staff, sending it flying. I whirled my staff and sent a current of air at the other ones in this group, causing them to join the first one. Surprisingly, the fog stayed intact. I launched myself at the other group and sent them the opposite way as the first group.
     Slowly, I maneuvered my way over to the Lava Destroyers, one at a time, and released a gas from the end of my staff all around them. Then I came to the Ruby Dragon and did the same thing. Returning to my original spot at the edge of the village, I inhaled deeply and the fog returned to me, leaving the gas floating in the air around the three looking like wispy remnants of the fog. "Hey! You three! Give me your best shot." The glared at my taunt and collectively took a deep breath. The Ruby Dragon opened its maw and released a giant fireball that ignited the gas around it and sent the great Dragon flying off the side of the mesa.
     The Destroyers were infuriated by this and lifter their arms to send lances of fire at me, but instead they too ignited the gas and made themselves leave the mountain very painfully. I fell to my knees after their echoed screams faded, exhausted. Tears streamed from my eyes. The tears were interlaced with the fog, bringing back the wispy tendrils. I had defeated them, but I had still lost Aeras. Just then, her muffled cry reached me from the other side of the village. My head whipped up and saw her being whisked away by a Fire Spectre.
     I snapped to my feet and began my sprint to save her, using the power of the air to aid me in my sprint. Aeras screamed for me and reached out her arms, desperate for me to save her. My legs barely touched the ground as I traveled. The Fire Spectre stopped and turned, looking at me. It appeared as if it were about to hurl a fire lance at me, so I sent a shockwave from my staff to intercept it. When my shockwave had closed half the distance between us the Spectre spun back around and continued on its journey.
     My shockwave hit Aeras instead. It hurled them towards the edge of the mountain and I increased my speed as much as I could. But I was too late. Aeras and the Fire Spectre fell down the side of the mountain. Aeras was knocked unconscious by the shockwave, so she was silent the entire way down.
     I dropped to my knees but no tears flowed from my eyes, only fog. Fog that would forever encompass this mountain, a warning to all who would scale it.
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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg374568#msg374568
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my story is included in my original post, didnt look like you had counted it when you did your completed tally
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Re: Short Story Competition - Draconic Guardians https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=29012.msg374574#msg374574
« Reply #35 on: August 02, 2011, 01:30:26 am »
my story is included in my original post, didnt look like you had counted it when you did your completed tally
I rushed my counting, so I said "3 or so" incase more stories were made. I looked down the thread later and noted any new stories added, so I am keeping tabs of things.

 

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