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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18625#msg18625
« Reply #12 on: January 19, 2010, 10:48:24 pm »
Good idea, except that there will probably be a lot of submissions, and each of them is pretty long. That's a lot of solid reading for any voter. :P

I'm extremely busy right now, but I'll try to get something on here.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18629#msg18629
« Reply #13 on: January 19, 2010, 11:09:18 pm »
I can still edit it right as long as the timer is still ticking down?
Yes. As long as the counter is ticking, you can edit all you want. When the counter goes to zero, I will lock this thread and compile a list of entries. Then we will vote for the winner.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18670#msg18670
« Reply #14 on: January 20, 2010, 05:03:37 am »
Hmm... *CRACKS KNUCKLES*

I'll work on a story. It will be called...

The Thirteenth.
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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18805#msg18805
« Reply #15 on: January 21, 2010, 12:28:53 am »
Once upon a time, there was a Thirteen Element called... um... let's see... um... (abandons project.) :P
Anyways, here's my short story.

Futility

Have you ever heard a thousand voices gasp, all at the same time? It’s quite an eerie sound, I assure you, and that’s exactly what I heard just now. I gasped with my fellow Archangels, for I was just as shocked as they were. Before me lay a simply gargantuan army. Their soldiers spread literally as far as the eye can see; I could still see their stark, lifeless forms from beyond the horizon. What was worse, they weren’t even human, angel, or any recognizable life form. They were skeletons. And they completely surrounded us.

   A gigantic army of skeletons charged in disorderly unison at my small regiment of Archangels pulled our swords in unison. There were about two hundred of us – not nearly enough to fend off the entire horde. We were barely even warriors – we were just a scout group, sent to investigate into the Rotting Plains, inhabited by disgusting Flesh Spiders and the like. Apparently, Morte had discovered our plans, and had summoned a massive skeleton army to stop us in our tracks. I had the feeling that he would succeed.

   As the first skeleton rushed towards me, I feinted at its skull, causing it to recoil in defense. I twirled around, plunging my sword deep into his ribcage and puncturing his ghastly spirit from within. In one clean motion, I whipped the sword back out, thrusting it deep into the neck joint of another skeleton powerful enough to shatter its bones. Cleaving left and right, the sword in my arms became a whirling arc of pure light, slicing cleanly through savages in all directions.

   As I scanned the scene with quick eyes, I realized that we might have a chance after all. The skeleton’s numbers were slowly fading, and my fellow Archangels were just as adept as I was in swordplay. One of them pulled out a bow and was sending light arrows careening into the skulls of our enemies; another was tending to the wounded around him, casting blessings of heaven to strengthen and bathing some in holy light in order to heal. We might have a chance after all. I continued my frenzied dance of destruction, swirling my blade around so quickly no skeletons even had a chance to touch me. Suddenly, I saw a sight that made my blood run cold.

   Morte himself stood quite a ways in front of us, his hollow eyes penetrating deep within my being. I could feel my soul struggling to stay afloat even as he stared at me, his infested green cape billowing in the bitter wind, his worn, bony hands clutching his warped staff of death. He raised his staff, and in one guttural syllable, every single one of the skeletons were now equipped with a bone shield. As they quickly regrouped, they formed a single vertical line facing us – a veritable Bonewall. Morte let loose a savage howl that almost caused me to drop my sword. He screeched another sigil, and the skeletons charged.

   I raised my sword and leapt at the nearest skeleton, flapping my wings ever so slightly to lift myself even higher. I dived, point down, at the skeleton, piercing his skull with crushing force from the top. As he perished, I pulled my sword out and sent it at another skeleton’s ribcage. The skeleton raised its shield in defence as my sword glanced off. The decaying bonebag shrieked maniacally, swinging a rotten sword at my wing. As I barely cut him down to size, I crouched down to heal my wounds.

   The battle wasn’t going well after the arrival of Morte. Somehow, he had given all the skeleton soldiers enchanted bone shields. As my comrades cut down more and more skeletons, their shields seemed to grow larger and thicker. Soon, with only a couple hundred of skeletons left, they were nigh immortal – they had impossibly thick full-body shields. We didn’t even score a single more kill as the skeletons diabolically rounded us up. Their shields were just too powerful to handle. There was only maybe fifty of us left, and we could only hold on for so long against the invincible army.

   Resistance was literally futile. For every furious thrust I made that somehow managed to destroy a skeleton, all the other ones just received strengthened shields. Soon, it was simply a rout. I dropped my sword – once a spinning arc of destruction, now an unwieldy and useless deadweight – and flew. It was my only hope. I flew higher and higher, faster and faster, hoping to avoid the same fate as my fellow Archangels as they were bloodily hacked down. But I was not to escape. Morte again rose his staff, and with one cruel note, a terrible Ivory Dragon sprang behind me.

   Its horridly sharp claws paled in comparison to its jawbone full of the sharpest ivory teeth you have ever seen. It roared in defiance, sending a miasma of poison swirling into my face. As I felt the poison enter my system, my muscled weakened and my flying grew slower. It was futile, from beginning to end. We were going up against a simply massive group of skeletons, equipped with shields that only got stronger as you battered more of them to bits, and dragons so terrible they rivaled even our rare Golden Dragons. I was done. It was futile. As the dragon sent a hooked claw flying at my chest, I thought I could still see the hollow face of Morte staring deep into my soul as everything went black…

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18822#msg18822
« Reply #16 on: January 21, 2010, 03:19:21 am »
Trying to keep this short; it clocks in at just under 300 words. I might work on something else later, but for now this will do as a placeholder entry. No points for guessing what it represents.


Anathema

It hadn't taken long for it to come to blows. Wandering the wastes, there was always a chance of meeting a child of another God, another "elemental". Almost everyone out here was a wanderer because they were looking for something. Mostly it was trouble.

The Child of Fire was even more volatile than its kin. Perhaps it was because their kinds had long been mortal enemies - they were iconic opposites, even - and it had taken exception to the Child of Water's mere presence. Perhaps it didn't like being distubed. It didn't matter why, really, there was nothing left for it but to fight.

Fire struck first. Billowing waves of heat poured from it and coalesced into an incandescent sword of almost pure heat. It charged, but Water was quick to call forth creatures to fight back. Though, there was something... not quite right about them - a taint, which marked them as not quite wholly water. Horrible weak jellyfish, they were quickly burned one by one, as Fire channeled its molten anger into them.

And then the source of the taint became clear, as the stench of death hung heavy around them. Water had corrupted itself, and laced its essence with a deadly contagion - one that seemed to wrap itself around Fire even as it lashed out heavily. Darker and more corrupt grew the contagion, but was matched just as quickly by the outpouring of heat in an intensifying struggle of each Child attempting to snuff out the essence of the other before succumbing. Fire broke first and lashed out, pouring the rest of its power into a searing lance of power. Water crumpled, crippled and broken.

But with that last effort, the coiling bands of poison snuffed the guttering candle. The Fire Child too collapsed.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18896#msg18896
« Reply #17 on: January 21, 2010, 04:30:04 pm »
Nice story's guys, keep the coming.

Just a suggestion, instead of having say 1 universal story explaining the entire concept/idea of the game. How about a Lore section? Maybe in the future www.elementsthegame.com (http://www.elementsthegame.com) will evolve into a more user-friendly website with integrated forums, card library, league and tournament details, highscores etc... but how about a Lore section?

A section detailing all the Lore and storyline of Elements so far, and as more and more new content is added, the users of the forums can submit more Lore and storyline (maybe through more story-line competitions). It'll give the game more substance and give the context and content of the game already a backbone.

I was reading Icybrakers 'Futility' entry, and it got me thinking. We could have a series of 'reports' or 'eyewitness accounts' of Elemental Battles, and we could tell the story of Elements that way? Just an idea :).

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18969#msg18969
« Reply #18 on: January 21, 2010, 10:38:51 pm »
Seems like a good idea; your breaking up into different sections like Card Library, Forum, and Lore stories are great.

Yep. Eyewitness accounts tell stories as well as convey drama and action. Sorry my story was too long; I started and just couldn't stop. Used a little creative license by giving a False God a tangible form :P

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18979#msg18979
« Reply #19 on: January 21, 2010, 11:18:49 pm »
Poetic License. It's allowed, Icybraker... I read yours and then I remembered reading some of the Lore on the Diablo 3 site... It typically lists creatures and monsters you will come across, aswell as the history of the regions and towns/villages you can travel to. Often in the form of an eye-witness account or ancient texts. Gave it a really nice flavor.

Google search: Diablo 3 and have a read :)

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg18987#msg18987
« Reply #20 on: January 21, 2010, 11:38:57 pm »
I saw this topic and ran in. I have some experience with writing, and well... Why not, right?

-----------------------Ascension of the gods-----------------------
A solitaire figure strode the lush fields of the planet of the elements.
Her mind set on a single action. An... Exchange of words, with her 'beloved' brother.
Her heart ached, as she remembered what she has seen, just a few moments ago.
The very destruction of dozens of elemental's, both elders and newborns.
She felt disgust and sorrow, knowing she had part in this horrible act.
He said that it would not go this far. He said that they will know when to stop... this slaughter.
But they did not. They just kept taking the lives of elemental's that had no idea why they were targeted.
Why they had been killed like the creatures they commanded.
But what hurt her the most, was the fact that she could not do a thing without joining them.
She felt like a coward, running from her own hell, instead of standing her ground and aiding the ones she felt so much sorrow and grief for.
She finally came to a stop and kneeled in the high grass. She felt the tears striding down her cheeks. She was ashamed of what she had become.
But then it came to her. She could end this, if she would be able to collect herself and finally go to him. To the one she despised the most, her own brother.
She got to her feet and ventured out of the fields, only to come to a horrible, yet painfully familiar place. The dwelling of her brother.
It was both astonishing, and frightening at the same time. The ground seemed as if it had been deprived of water for ages, even though a river stood only a few dozen feet away. There were no plants, no life anywhere. The sun seemed to stand mightier in this land, more then in any other place.
But even among all of these horrible sights, she had not wavered. Not because of her resolve, but another more sad reason; she had been to this place many times over.
Her feet started marching once more, after she had locked her thoughts in place.
She had decided; she would end this genocide.
She knew exactly where to go. He allways was there, never to dirty his own hands.
And why should he? He has such loyal lackeys and colleagues, that would do what she has just escaped, many times over.
Her eyes finally caught up to the picture in her mind. There it was, the very quarters of her beloved brother.
It seemed to blend so well into it's surroundings; it was cracked and rigid, and seemed to have suffered just as much as the land around it has. No one would have dared to think such a genius would reside in such a place.
As she came to the very door of the foundation, she started to feel fear taking her. But she could not leave this place, unless she would end this disaster.
She knocked on the door, and waited for his response.
"Come in." called back a slithering voice.
She felt as if her spine was frozen, yet she had to do this.
She opened the door, and without hesitation spoke; "This must end!"
"It is good to see you too, Fira." he replied softly as he turned to her away from the window he was standing at; his appearance was uncanny, his eyes dry and snake like, his hair brown like the dead soil outside and his body so frail and slim. Yet he gave off an odd feeling, one of certainty and triumph.
Even though she had seen him many times, she felt distressed and uncertain. But she knew what she must do. Or else she would never forgive herself.
"Enough of this brother! Please!" she cried out to him, her voice shaken; "Must we slaughter our own people just for a fragment of power?!"
"A fragment?" he replied to her, his voice certain unlike that of his sister.
"Oh no sister," he turned to her; "We will be all powerfull! And I do not mean as powerfull as our elders. Oh no, not at all."
He smiled to her, yet it did not seem like as smile as much as a sick pervertion of delight.
"But why like this?!" she shouted, her voice booming along the tiny hut; "Can we not gain power by other means?!"
"You knew exactly what you were getting yourself into Fira." he replied to her, turning back to the window; "We must go through with this to the end. To be the masters of our land."
"But... Not like this..." she cried softly; "Not like this..."
"Oh do not worry sister. When we are done, all of this land shall shout our names." he said triumphantly; "With me as their leader."
He gazed at the sun and continued softly with a grin; "And all shall know the name: Seism."
----------------------- The End-----------------------
Rpg'ish? Yep. Couldn't help it I guess.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg19000#msg19000
« Reply #21 on: January 22, 2010, 12:57:55 am »
I figured I'd do something on a bit more personal of a level.

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"And that", said the adventuress, "is why I wear this ring."  She let the grief she felt in her heart show on her face, remembering her husband's presence.  Still, she couldn't help glancing up with a tiny spark of hope at the face of the Nymph Queen.  But there was nothing.  Nothing!  She had laid her life on the line to get here, and then bore her heart to this beautiful...inhuman...thing, and there wasn't a trace of emotion on her face as she nodded pseudo-sympathetically and murmured small sounds of comfort.

Bitch.

She knew that soon, the moon would shift, the tides would come, and the cave that led out of the Nymph Queen's grotto would be filled with water -- and those damned Toadfish.  She couldn't afford to stay for long if she wanted to make it out in time to save her husband.  But she needed those tears!

Closing her eyes, she fought back her own.  The memories of her travails threatened to overwhelm her.  From hearing the horrible news -- that her husband had been infected with Aflatoxin -- to her heart-rendering discovery that all of the Basilisk Blood in the country had been moved to the capital for wartime purposes... From her desperate quest to find the venerable Procrastination and buy herself long enough to find a new way to lengthen her husband's life, to the extraordinary journey over Poseidon's Sea to the Isle of Beauty and then here to the Nymph Queen herself... And now, at the apex of her quest, to be foiled by something as simple as making a girl cry... She blinked, fast and hard.   

Taking a long, shaky breath, she calmed herself and looked around the grotto.  There had to be something here that mattered to this cold-hearted creature.  Some sign of humanity...

She spotted it on the ground yards away, buried up to the hilt in coral.  The legendary Discord!  Of course!  It could scramble the Nymph's brains, make her...no.  It wasn't reliable enough. 

She saw it hanging on the wall, a massive bulk that almost looked like some kind of shield -- a gigantic Parasite, waiting for something to come near enough to infect.  Of course!  She would guarantee the Nymph's demise, and it would cry for it's impending loss...no.  Even in the face of her husband's cancerous passage, she couldn't kill something of such beauty.

She noticed it in the water, floating passively in the waves -- a bottle of Antimatter.  Of course!  It made things opposite -- it would make the Nymph Queen empathic and sensitive, and she would realize the impact of the story of her time-slowed husband slowly dying a continent away...no.  Even an ignorant adventuress knows that you can't mix Antimatter with...well, anything, at least if you wanted it on YOUR side.

Slowly, manically, the adventuress began to giggle.  So many tools had been inadvertently gathered here by the tide, and yet, nothing would suffice.  Her husband was going to die, and she was going to be trapped here by the rising tide with someone who wouldn't even begin to understand why she was upset.

Her laughter rang out, and echoed across the walls of the grotto, causing sensitive crystals to ring out a reverberating sound.  Her own voice laughed back at her as it careened back and forth across the chamber -- soon joined by a second voice.

The adventuress looked back toward the Nymph Queen, and saw a slim smile creasing that perfect face...heard a tinkling of laughter from the tiny mouth.  It was funny, seeing a creature so impassive to honest emotion suddenly caught up in simple mania.  The adventuress started to laugh louder, more cynically, at the Queen's complete inhumanity.

Minutes passed, and the two women began to sink to the floor, clutching their sides.  The adventuress blinked as her cheeks wet with hysterical tears...and suddenly, she was on her feet, vial in hand, diving toward the Nymph Queen.  A scrape of glass on porcelain skin, and she had it! 

Suddenly grim, she turned toward the cave and heard the first trickles of water beginning to flow in.  She didn't need Bottled Precognition to know that her journey back was going to be even harder than her trip here -- but with the Nymph's Tears at her side, she would find a Pillar of elemental Stone and free the Auburn Nymph inside using the Queen's tears...and with the debt of the Auburn Nymph, she would see her husband in a form that was much more resistant to the Aflatoxin...if only he could survive long enough for her to get home.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg19022#msg19022
« Reply #22 on: January 22, 2010, 09:00:57 am »
I have to say these stories are amazing. Really impressive.

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Re: Elements Short Story Competition https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=2269.msg19024#msg19024
« Reply #23 on: January 22, 2010, 09:33:09 am »
Yeah, I'm amazed. There is some nice talent in this community! What's more, is that it is not going to waste ;)

 

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