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Succubus | Lilith https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=21330.msg272687#msg272687
« on: February 17, 2011, 06:29:19 pm »
NAME:
Succubus
ELEMENT:
Darkness
COST:
5 [2 (Atk) + 3 (Ability?)]
TYPE:
Creature
ATK|HP:
2 | 1
TEXT:
:darkness :darkness :darkness : Seduction
Steal target creature for one turn.
NAME:
Lilith
ELEMENT:
Darkness
COST:
6 [4 (Atk) + 3 (Ability?) - 1 (Upgraded)]
TYPE:
Creature
ATK|HP:
4 | 2
TEXT:
:darkness :darkness :darkness :darkness : Corruption
Steal target creature and poison it. Inflict yourself X damages, where X is its cost.
ART:
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IDEA:
Kaos.
NOTES:
"Steal target creature for one turn": Like for phoenix's rebirth.

Informations about the two "creatures": http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Succubus (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Succubus), http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lilith (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lilith). The idea of poisoning the creature you steal with Lilith refers to the corruption "she" incarnates and uses to seduct her preys (it also balances a bit the ability I think^^).
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This is my first card, don't be rude plz. xD

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Re: Succubus | Lilith https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=21330.msg272689#msg272689
« Reply #1 on: February 17, 2011, 06:34:01 pm »
First of all, if this is your first card, awesome job! It looks extremely good but alot of the credits for that go to the artist aswell. A google link won't do I'm afraid, you need permission from the artist. I'm not an expert either though, so dunno if this is free or not.

Secondly this would be to "nude" for Elements. I personally don't mind, but other people do.

Thirdly, the mechanism to control/steal another creature isn't accepted in Elements. I don't know why either but I think the creator doesn't want it.

I really like your originality and effort though! As I said, it looks great but I'm afraid you need to change the art + abilities.

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Re: Succubus | Lilith https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=21330.msg272702#msg272702
« Reply #2 on: February 17, 2011, 07:07:46 pm »
Oh, well, ok. xD

Now I know what I don't have to propose the next time. :P

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Re: Succubus | Lilith https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=21330.msg273111#msg273111
« Reply #3 on: February 18, 2011, 06:00:11 am »
Lilith art is copyrighted to Wizards of the Coast. I'd suggest changing it, or leaving the art empty for now if you have trouble finding suitable, rights-free material.
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Re: Succubus | Lilith https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=21330.msg273126#msg273126
« Reply #4 on: February 18, 2011, 07:06:50 am »
CURATOR COMMENT
-Not only were both images not available to use Kaos, but at least one of those images was considered NSFW; please DO NOT post those images or links again, or you may face more severe consequences. I personally removed them myself to avoid any other conflicts and complaints from some members of the community.


That said, keep the COST simple - trying to add variable equations can make it overly complex. The mechanic itself is fine, but it might seem a bit too risky for most players to use the upgraded version, as expensive creatures (nymphs, dragons, other high hitters, etc.) will often hurt the player more than the other (a player getting hit for the cost of the creature while the other player has it poisoned...?).

Also, WELCOME to the Card Ideas and Art Board. Please P.M. me with any questions you have regarding Card making and or the CIA board in general, and I'll do my best to assist you, okay? :)

 

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