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DL (Round 2 - Writer Task) https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=54232.msg1132308#msg1132308
« on: April 07, 2014, 04:40:53 pm »
1st Draft:

Anje hovered a feet above the ground, and still the rhythmic beat of her feet made sounds with the rocky soil. Why is he taking this long? Seriously, has all the fire and divinity blinded him or something? After all those millennia of waiting at my feet, you’d think he’d have grown a bit more time-sense! He’s so not right for this... She trailed off, having seen a sudden flurry of movement. A Rustler poked its head out, one of its branches dangling beside it. “Poor thing,” Anje sympathized, “Let me patch you up.” With a simple wave of her hand, the branch was back to normal.

The Rustler looked at her with grateful eyes, but after a moment scampered off with sudden terror. Anje sighed; she knew the cause of the poor beast’s terror. Slowly, she turned to find herself staring into Seraf’s blazing red eyes. “You’re late,” Anje mouthed coldly; “Don’t they teach you to tell the time at the Divine Palaces anymore?”

Seraf smiled, the fire in his eyes starting to cool. “Don’t worry, I’m here now. And…”

“Don’t worry?” Anje started, “The fact that you’re here is why I should be worried.”

“But why, darling!” Seraf smirked, his eyes starting to blaze up once more, “I am the perfect one for you. I’m so hot; I set fire to the earth. I shall ignite your radiance and…”

“Oh please. Your half literate droning would give anyone a headache. Seriously Seraf, you must let me go-” The rest of her words were muffled as Seraf pulled her in close, leaving a kiss on her lips.

“You can’t honestly say that you didn’t like that,” Seraf grinned. “Come on baby, let’s do it!”

Anje blinked. “No! We can’t, okay Seraf?”

“But why not? Am I still not good enough for Miss Perfect Angel?”

 “Umm, kind of. But even if I were madly in love with you, we couldn’t have.” She stared at Seraf’s puzzled expression, “Wow, you really are stupid huh? You never noticed that there aren’t any bedrooms in the Palace?”

Seraf still couldn’t understand; his blank expression was making Anje burst with laughter. She resisted the urge to make fun of her superior, and decided it was time to leave. “Goodbye Seraf! Maybe one day you’ll grow a pair!” She laughed as she hovered on towards Divinity.



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Re: Round 2 - Writer Task https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=54232.msg1132322#msg1132322
« Reply #1 on: April 07, 2014, 06:16:19 pm »
Good work Zawad, I wouldn't write anything better for sure :) Only one thing, isn't the correct spelling: seraph?
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Re: Round 2 - Writer Task https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=54232.msg1132358#msg1132358
« Reply #2 on: April 07, 2014, 11:59:19 pm »
Seraf is a made-up name for the Seraph; I was simply doing some fun with the names (like Anje for Angel).

But the thing is, I'm here on the team to write for you. So the question isn't if you can write anything better, but if the other writers can write anything better. So yeah, criticism criticism gimme your criticism!
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Re: Round 2 - Writer Task https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=54232.msg1132462#msg1132462
« Reply #3 on: April 09, 2014, 04:57:09 pm »
Anje hovered a feet above the ground, and still the rhythmic beat of her feet made sounds with the rocky soil. Why is he taking this long? Seriously, has all the fire and divinity blinded him or something? After all those millennia of waiting at my feet, you’d think he’d have grown a bit more time-sense! He’s so not right for this... She trailed off, having seen a sudden flurry of movement. A Rustler poked its head out, one of its branches dangling beside it. “Poor thing,” Anje sympathized, “Let me patch you up.” With a simple wave of her hand, the branch was back to normal.

The Rustler looked at her with grateful eyes, but after a moment scampered off with sudden terror. Anje sighed; she knew the cause of the poor beast’s terror. Slowly, she turned to find herself staring into Seraf’s blazing red eyes. “You’re late,” Anje mouthed coldly; “Don’t they teach you to tell the time at the Divine Palaces anymore?”

Seraf smiled, the fire in his eyes starting to cool. “Don’t worry, I’m here now. And…”

“Don’t worry?” Anje started, “The fact that you’re here is why I should be worried.”

“But why, darling!” Seraf smirked, his eyes starting to blaze up once more, “I am the perfect one for you. I’m so hot; I set fire to the earth. I shall ignite your radiance and…”

“Oh please. Your half literate droning would give anyone a headache. Seriously Seraf, you must let me go-” The rest of her words were muffled as Seraf pulled her in close, leaving a kiss on her lips. She could feel his heat surging into herself; feel his hand as it slithered up her hips…

“Enough!!” Anje’s voice echoed across the clearing. Seraf crouched, mouthing something like “Father, I’m scared.”

Suddenly, Anje’s vision grew blurred. She coughed, “Where’s all this smoke coming from?” As she searched with reddened eyes, she found the source to be Seraf’s groin. What had just went on there, she didn’t dare imagine.

“I peed my robe!” Seraf whined, much to Anje’s amusement, “What’s come over you, Anje? You seem aggressive all of a sudden. What has come over you?”

“It’s an upgrade, you understand, you stupid piece of burning junk?” Anje shrilled, unable to control her laughter, “Looks like Father doesn’t love you enough anymore, huh?”

Seraf started grinning stupidly; apparently only the word love had gotten through. “So you do love me, huh? Come on baby, let’s do it!”

Anje burst out into uncontrollable laughter. “Seriously Seraf, you are stupid! Didn’t you know there are no secret rooms in Heaven? Did you actually think we’d be able to do it, ever?”

Seraf still couldn’t understand; his blank expression was making Anje cry with laughter. She resisted the urge to make fun of her superior, and decided it was time to leave. “Goodbye Seraf! Maybe one day you’ll grow a pair!” She laughed as she hovered on towards Divinity.
« Last Edit: April 10, 2014, 03:28:16 pm by Zawadx »
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Re: Round 2 - Writer Task https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=54232.msg1132544#msg1132544
« Reply #4 on: April 10, 2014, 12:48:55 pm »
So, I saw Anje Seraf, and rustler. But the romance story was between Anje and Seraf. Doesn't the romance story have to be between 2 elements creatures? Maybe replace Anje with something? Or am I being thick headed and Anje is an elements creature just spelled weird like Seraf?
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Re: Round 2 - Writer Task https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=54232.msg1132557#msg1132557
« Reply #5 on: April 10, 2014, 02:42:17 pm »
Anje = Angel
Seraf = Seraph

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