DL (Round 1 - Boss/Writer Task)

[Calambar]

Ok, I have a rough idea for a story.

It is connected with deckbuilder and off-topicer task.

PICTURE 1.

Picture of a temple with high tower and light symbol (like in asymmetry's flag), seen from the bottom. Description: "Temple of Divine Light".

PICTURE 2.

Me as the Divine Light Highest Priest talking with THE ALMIGHTY DIVINE LIGHT. I will wear a white robe with light symbol. (I have an ability to create and control Photons, check deckbuilder task). 

Dialogues:

ADL: -You need to spread the good word of light, we need more followers. Go to pagans and convert them into LIGHT! They all shell come into the light!

PICTURE 3.

Same scenery, different perspective. ADL continunes:

-I will give you enough power even to control creatures that hide in the darkness, [comment: becouse Skotadi is a vampire] so as to show the world true power of LIGHT!

Now I need your help and brainstorm Zawad (and others if they will).

In next pictures I meet each member of my team, I need text for that pictures. Remember about our word limit!

Of course, edition of my existing text is welcomed as well:)

[CrockettRocket]

Picture 4 your robe is blowing in the wind, and the perspective of the scenery takes place behind you, with that same light symbol crest on your upper shoulder blades of your back (try to add muscle to his shoulders if possible) and your trying to calm a bull, with an out stretched arm and an upright hand, but instead of stiff fingers at the top they should be curled a bit because he is a priest. (Also try to include the Almighty Diety in the foreground along with the priest and me in the background coming straight towards them in the middle of the two.)

[Background: he is trying to calm a bull, see the deck builder task, I am represented by a sapphire charger)

"As the battle wages on throughout the dessert, the priest is getting tired, but alas! CrockettRocket(/nickname I get in this story) is no match for the priest and the almighty deity! (Emphasis on almighty)

[Zawadx]

A brief Outline I brainstormed:

- Krzy blinks in prayer, and also to make sure he's not hallucinating. His temple is empty! His followers have turned their backs on him.
- Krzy comes out into the Room of Blinding Light, and dark spots suddenly appear in his vision. He fails to  understand them.
- The Almighty Divine Light addresses  Krzy, asking how his progress is going. Krzy replies how his followers have disappeared in the Lands of Darkness.
- ADL then makes Krzy the Highest Priest, hands him the Code of Light (Morse Code) and gives him the powers or light including control over a dark creature. He instructs Krzy to leave Earth/Planet X and wander the Elemental world in search of followers.
- Krzy meets Zawadx, the shapeshifting Psion
-Krzy meets Spike, the ancient/??? Anubis (with a stethoscope and a beard )
- Krzy meets Crockett, the ??? Charger
- Krzy meets Fippe, the ??? Recluse
- Krzy meets Skullen the sparkly vampire! And uses his powers on the poor guy.
- Krzy meets assymetry, the ??? Demon
- Converting a Demon summons Discord the HB. Krzy and company defeat the HB, using our Deckbuilder Deck and Card Designer Card.
- Krzy and Co. stand in a line, showcasing the team
- Krzy and Company walk to the temple and hear of Brawl. (No conflict? It perfectly fits the ideal of the Light! Let's have some fun shall we?)
- Krzy and Co. Win Brawl! Ooops, spoiler alert.


What we mainly need to do is find some adjectives for everyone's creatures. Are y'all ok with how you're portrayed? Also, feedback welcome!

[Zawadx]

Spoiler for Hidden:

P-1: "Temple of Divine LIGHT"

P-2: Interior of the Temple (empty for all except Krzy)

Krzy: It can't be… it must just be an illusion! Where have all my followers gone? Have they all lost their way in the Lands of Darkness?

P-3: Room of Blinding LIGHT, showing Krzy entering. ADL is also there.

Almighty Divine LIGHT: Krzy, highest priest of the LIGHT, how fares your progress?
Krzy: O Light, my followers no longer remain. I couldn't teach them anything, and they've perished in the darkness.

P-4: Room Of Blinding LIGHT, from behind ADL

Almighty Divine Light:  Then you are my last remaining follower. Fear not, Krzy the valiant! We shall depart this forsaken land, and find a new realm. It is the Elemental World, where you'll find stronger and worthier followers. Here, take this gift!

P-5: Room of Blinding Light, tablet of the CODE of LIGHT on the ground

Krzy: What is this, your Luminance?
Almighty Divine Light: It is my Code. Preach it to the world, and you shall be endowed with the power of the LIGHT! I also give you power over the creatures of Darkness. Do not forget your pilgrimage!

P-6: Room Of Blinding Light, Krzy picks up the Tablet as ADL fades

P-7: "Oracle Plains, near Aether Palace" (grassy area with lightning on the horizon, Krzy and I are talking)

Krzy: Greetings stranger! Who might you be?
Zawadx: Me? I'm whoever you want me to be!
Krzy: Well, could you become a follower of the glorious and divine LIGHT!?
Zawadx: Hmm, okay okay, no need to shout.

P-8: "Sands of Time" (desert area, Krzy's talking with Spike)

Spike: My son, are you ailing? I could assist you with a touch of my Stethoscope if you wish. It's rumored to make you immortal. I can't say, no one's passed this way for ages.
Krzy: You have the ideals of the LIGHT! How would you feel to aid the world with your touch?
Spike: Only if you can pay the medical bills.

P-9: "Back in the Oracle Plains" (Zawadx and CR)

P-10: "The Graven Cavern" (Krzy and Fippe)

Fippe: These lands are so dead and boring
Krzy: Then join me and come to the LIGHT
Fippe: But the LIGHT is boring as well
Krzy: Oh come on!
Fippe: I guess I could give it a try!

P-11: "The Lands of Darkness" (Krzy and Sko)
P-12: "Anarchia" (Krzy and Co. with Assymetry)

P-13: Krzy and Co. face Discord Part I(Discord is wrecking our quanta and Antimattering like mad)
P-14: Krzy and Co. face Discord Part II (Sancts come out and stop Discord, Our created card comes in somehwere)

P-15: Krzy and Co. on the way to the temple, hear of Brawl
P-16: Krzy and Co. line up for group photo

Someone: Wow, we look more like a rainbow than a team.
Krzy: Well, there can't be a Rainbow without LIGHT!
Zawadx: Will you stop with the caps already.

P-17: Krzy and Co. are winning Brawl

Zawadx: Ooops, fast forwarded a bit. Spoiler alert!

A rough draft. Yes, it fails completely. Yes, even stripped down to bare dialogue it's over 250 words, and that's with 10 out of 17 pictures dialogued. Yes, I suck so much.

[Calambar]

This is sample of a comic. I know it is bad. This is all I can do in such a short period of time we have when it comes to drawing. So we have 3 options:

1. I will draw it like that
2. I can make comic just from copy and paste technique (like comic from brawl II). I'm not very happy about using just cut out original art.
3. Let assymetry draw it... but I'm not happy about it as this is my task :/

What is your opinion about this, team? Let me know ASAP!

EDIT:
Next image


Heh, I actually had to draw the rest of the body
More to come

Now Anubis:

[Calambar]

Ok, last portion of characters.

Flesh and demon:



And myself


^ Lol, it was so time-consuming for an amateur like me, but I'm quite happy with my character ^^

[Calambar]

Edited Anubis (first one sucked). I added goatie!

[Calambar]

Some possible script, taken from pad chat as I don't have time to edit it

krzysiekxd: Me talling to Anubis Spike: Join light! Spike: Light? I can at last light... cigarrete [Spike smoking cigarette]
2:12 krzysiekxd: what do you thing about this part?
2:14 krzysiekxd: at last = at most
2:15 Skotadi Phobos : Brilliant
2:16 Skotadi Phobos : A joint would be better but I doubt that's okay on the forum
2:17 krzysiekxd: [me as crusader] Someone: Are you secretly a crusader? Another one: But how can you carry Morning Glory? It's untargetable! Me: I'm a boss! And I'm carrying it like a boss
2:18 Skotadi Phobos : "also...it's more of a play sword my mom made...I can't carry a real sword any more..."
2:19 krzysiekxd: hehe
2:19 Skotadi Phobos : Slice one holy text in half and everyone freaks out
2:20 krzysiekxd: [Me to vamp] i know why are you hiding in the dark broke poor one vampie. Save on electricity and join light!
2:22 Skotadi Phobos : Nah bro, it's actually because I burst into flames in the light
2:22 Skotadi Phobos : Good guess though
2:23 krzysiekxd: When spike refuses to join: Me" I give you this shiny sapphire. Me to charger: -gimmie this!
2:24 Skotadi Phobos : lol
2:24 krzysiekxd: I to vamp" burst into flames?! Haha, it's a myth, gonna call for myth busters
2:26 krzysiekxd: [Adam Savage, Jamie Hyneman heads saying "myth busted!]
2:26 Skotadi Phobos : Well then it must be true
2:27 krzysiekxd: lol, if I only had more time I would draw a masterpiece
2:27 krzysiekxd: and we have this stupid 250 words limit too
2:27 Skotadi Phobos : Yeah that

[Calambar]

Ok, sorry Zawadx I cannot wait any longer for any suggestions and working script (but thanks for trying ), drawing and arrenging comic is time consuming so I have to work. We are running out of time. I don't think I can accept any changes in this script, only please check this in terms of grammar. I hope you like it at least a little ;]

Here is the undetailed script (no need to provide detailed, you will see comic in the near furure). This is exactly what I'm going to send Brawlmasters. It has 249 words I checked it here: http://www.wordcounter.net/

Now my script:

Divine Light Comic Inc.
presents
Brawl Team Divine Light Formation

TEMPLE OF DIVINE LIGHT

CHAMBER OF DIVINE LIGHT

WARNING
Please wear welding mask before entering. Failure to comply with safety rules may
result in temporary or permanent blindness.

-What is today's WORD from Almighty Divine Light for me?

-I'm ready my deity. You can blink!

-Brawl. Team. Light. Go.

This is how it all started. Krzysiekxd set for long and dangerous journey in search for light followers for his brawl team.

He met Sapphire accelerated like Rocket charger.
-I can make your sapphire diode shine even more!
-Awesome!

Reluctant Spike Anubis Spiegel.
-Joining Light? At most I can light... my cigarrete.
-I give you this sapphire diode!
-Well, ok.
-Gimme this silly diode!
-NOOOOOO!

Flesh Fippe Recluse.
-How can I, slimy death creature, join light?
-Flesh? It must be a typo. You are flash recluse, and flash belong to Light!
-Oh, all right then.

Skotadi Vamp Phobos
-You poor broke vampie, I know why you're hiding in the dark. Save on electricity and join light!
-Nah bro, it's actually because I burst into flames in the light, Good guess though.
-It is a myth. Ask mythbusters!
MYTH BUSTED
-Well then it must be true...

Psion Zawadx and Asymmetrical Demon
-Are you secretly a crusader?
-But Morning glory is untargetable!
-I'm the boss and I can carry it like a boss (even with this welding mask on my face).

They all....

BROADCAST CUT OFF DUE TO SILLY 250 WORDS LIMIT


I will try to draw this comic ASAP!!!

[CrockettRocket]

You forgot zawadx 

[Calambar]

You forgot zawadx 

I did not... Did you actually read it? ;]

[Zawadx]

Divine Light Comic Inc.
presents
Brawl Team Divine Light Formation

TEMPLE OF DIVINE LIGHT

CHAMBER OF DIVINE LIGHT

WARNING
Please wear welding mask before entering. Failure to comply with safety rules may
result in temporary or permanent blindness.

-What is today's WORD from Almighty Divine Light for me?

-I'm ready my deity. You can blink!

-Brawl. Team. Light. Go.

This is how it all started. Krzysiekxd set out on a long and dangerous journey in search of light followers for his brawl team.

He met Sapphire accelerated-like-Rocket charger.
-I can make your sapphire diode shine even more!
-Awesome!

Reluctant Spike Anubis Spiegel.
-Joining Light? At most I can light... my cigarrete.
-I give you this sapphire diode!
-Well, ok.
-Gimme this silly diode!
-NOOOOOO!

Flesh Fippe Recluse.
-How can I, slimy death creature, join light?
-Flesh? It must be a typo. You are flash recluse, and flash belong to Light!
-Oh, all right then.

Skotadi Vamp Phobos
-You poor broke vampie, I know why you're hiding in the dark. Save on electricity and join light!
-Nah bro, it's actually because I burst into flames in the light, Good guess though.
-It is a myth. Ask mythbusters!
MYTH BUSTED
-Well then it must be true...

Psion Zawadx and Asymmetrical Demon
-Are you secretly a Crusader?
-But Morning Glory is untargetable!
-I'm the boss and I can carry it like a boss (even with this welding mask on my face).

They all....

BROADCAST CUT OFF DUE TO SILLY 250 WORDS LIMIT