[Round 6] - Writer Task [Final Draft]

[Silver Emerald]

Writer Task, Week VI, Brawl V

Challenge: Write or narrate an opening story for elements, that would play before the game began to establish a mood and setting!

Submission starts below the dotted line:

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Welcome to Elements

Time began with a darkened land beneath windswept waves. Then light, first of many more forces, was created from the chaos. With the sun came heat and more light, shining on the drying ground. It, and the moon marked the passage of time as space expanded. Before long the world was filled with living things, transient though they were, which adhered to the physical laws governing the world.

Then were the elementals. Granted higher sentience than the rest of the creatures, they were tasked with the care of their world and the balance of the twelve major forces, the elements, which weaved though the fabric of reality.

But with any stability comes the necessary struggle to retain it. Small disagreements, cracks between leaders of the people, grew into factional divisions, the greatest of which was the fracturing of the elements.

Despite this conflict the race of elementals spread across the realm. Broken as a nation, but each faction united by ideology.

The role of political leaders slowly subsided as wars frequently crossed the land; such officials were replaced by faction generals, called the Masters. Some elementals who sought ever-greater power proclaimed themselves as divine successors, relentless against those who would dare defy their abilities. In peace as well, competition remained ever-present, whether between the land's artisans or in the tense circles of the Arena. A fighting spirit indeed exists in each member of this world.


This realm is where your path has led, traveler.
Whichever allegiance you choose, to one faction or several, represent it well.
Seek your fortunes among the great. Defeat the enemies before you until only dust and the thrum of your own power remains.

Welcome to...
(Title screen)
Elements



Presenting narration thanks to JCJ: Welcome to Elements

[JonathanCrazyJ]

progress?

[Silver Emerald]

Progress is that the draft should be up within an hour. ^^

[JonathanCrazyJ]

I sort of love you right now

[Silver Emerald]

Draft exists. After some thought, I decided shorter was probably better and that starting with a quote could very well be a good idea. And, since I wrote in a brief history of the realm, the opening is written such that between the quote and the first paragraph all twelve elements are referenced.

Spoiler for Draft 1:

'In the beginning, when God created the heavens and the earth, the earth was a formless wasteland, and darkness covered the abyss, while a mighty wind swept over the waters. Then God said, "Let there be light," and there was light.' - Genesis 1:1-3

From the beginning of the world with a darkened land beneath windswept waves, light and much more was made from the chaos; with the sun came heat and more light, shining on the drying ground. It and the moon marked the passage of time as space expanded. Before long the world was filled with living things, transient though they were, which adhered to the physical laws governing the world.

Then there were the elementals. Granted higher cognizance than the rest of the creatures, they were tasked with the care of their world and the balance of the twelve major forces, or elements, which existed in the fabric of reality.

But with any stability is the necessary struggle to retain it. Small disagreements, cracks between leaders of the people, grew into factional divisions on which of the elements was best.

From this conflict the race of elementals spread across the realm. Broken as a nation, but each faction united by ideology.

The role of political leaders slowly subsided as wars frequently crossed the land; such officials were replaced by faction generals, called the Masters. Some elementals who sought ever-greater power proclaimed themselves as divine successors, relentless against those who would dare defy their abilities. In peace as well, competition remained ever-present, whether between the land's artisans or in the tense circles of the Arena. A fighting spirit indeed exists in each member of this world.


This realm is where your path has led, traveler.
Whichever allegiance you choose, to one faction or several, represent it well.
Seek your fortunes among the great, defeating and scaling your opposition to the highest heights.

Welcome to...
(Title screen)
Elements

[JonathanCrazyJ]

edited draft, only minor edits, a word here or there, and I deleted the Bible quote, as that could be taken the wrong way, especially if it's the first thing people see or hear in the game.

Will record soonTM

[Silver Emerald]

Made another alteration (mostly keeping the general order of the first paragraph).

I knew the quote had the potential to be grounds for contention, but I'm also loathe to begin the story as abruptly as it does now. Will look into potential solutions.

[JonathanCrazyJ]

Edited a little, and recorded, added to OP but here it is too https://soundcloud.com/crazejonathan/welcome-to-elements

[Silver Emerald]

All right, a bit of formatting later, and this is what we're looking at for the final!

(...also, if you haven't gone and listened to the narration, you really should do so. Gives excellent depth.)