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My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg478908#msg478908
« on: April 10, 2012, 07:43:39 PM »
Hi everyone... :)

I like writing poems. They help me get through hard times. I tend to depressions, mostly with no reason. I don't know, it seems to be the way I am. And I don't like it.
So whenever I felt sad or angry for being down for no reason words began to rhyme in my head and I wrote them. I never thought much about my poems, they somehow wrote themselves.

English is not my native language, so there might be mistakes in my poems, I hope they're not too disturbing :)
Oh, and of course I also hope that some of you find pleasure in reading them.

I might edit this post from time to time in case new stuff comes in :)

So, let's get started:

Heartache
Spoiler for Hidden:
Here I stand,
Observing the end.

Waiting for the sunrise.
It's cold, my heart cries.

I go home,
I feel alone.

I take a shower,
The water's hot.
I have no power,
My heart is shot.

No matter how warm,
The ice won't melt.
My blood brings harm,
'Cause with Love I dealt.

No matter where I go in life,
I always walk into your knife.
If you were to tear it out,
Screams of pain I'd shout.

We are born with a need
For Love. And so we seek,
Wander around the world,
Looking for the one to hold.

(I search for the right direction,
In hope to find some affection.
To get into the embrace of perfection,
I have to face more than one rejection.)


Spoiler for Personal Note:
So... I wrote this in 10 minutes. Maybe it makes sense, maybe not. Just summarizing my day... If you find any grammar mistakes just let me know.

Completed Perfection
Spoiler for Hidden:
Completed Perfection

I hold you softly in my arm,
Saving you from all the harm.
We know, the world is hard,
But I will be your guard.

I have only one worry,
And itíd make me sorry,
If Iím not able to protect
All that makes us perfect.

People say we are too different,
But this makes us so excellent.
We would fight against the earth,
because for our love itís worth.

No matter what people want
Weíll never let us daunt.
And if the world is going to eclipse
Iíll brighten your soul, kissing your lips.

Youíre the beauty, Iím the beast.
And our love will never cease.
Youíre the wave and Iím the sea,
Together forever weĎll be.

IĎm your air and youíre the candle,
Only so we can barely handle,
This all surrounding shade,
Which thanks to us begins to fade.

YouĎre the sun, and Iím the flower,
because you are the power
that keeps me more than just alive.
youíre the reason that I thrive.

We keep us away from death,
Because weĎre each others breath.
I want to carry your golden heart,
thatís why weíll never come apart.

Youíre my little girl,
Youíre my secret pearl.
Youíre the reason why
I live and die.

You should know that I love you
But not because I need you.
But I need you,
because I love you.

Live forever in eternity
Spoiler for Hidden:
I crowned so many nights
I watched to the sky and saw those lights
But they couldnít shine into my darkness
Caused of my big emptiness

All I got in my short life
Was nothing but despise
The less I ever wanted was your embrace
But I got nothing but disgrace

I went to the graveyard
And played the last remained card
Dead, that's what I want to be
So I'd feel nothing than eternity

In the hole, I'm lying
With the corps, I'm dying
All I ever wanted is a lie
And now I say goodbye, I told you why.

Flowing Dreams
Spoiler for Hidden:
Once I had some dreams
But now to me it seems
Like theyíre slowly flowing,
Wherever this streamĎs going.
 
They vanish with the river;
What remains is a shiver,
A doleful afterglow,
Which warmthĎs colder than snow.

 And where the river finds itĎs end
The horizon becomes itís friend.
Thatís the line Iíll never reach,
I got punished for my breach.

 But by now itís way too late,
I canít escape this fate.
My dreams smile at me by far,
Giving nothing than another scar.

This sunset reminds me of you,
I wish your illusion was true.
Iíd like so much this sun to stay,
To never ever fade away.

 You're like the sunlight,
You posses the sunís delight.
I will miss your warmness,
When the night brings coldness.


My dream was to call you mine,
But I was not in time,
Itís my fault, itís fine,
Iíll walk my tragic story line.

Youíll always be my sunshine,
Thatís the tragic story line,
Maybe all this was fate,
But Iíll pass hell's gate, I'll escape.

The Dying in Me
Spoiler for Hidden:
My world is going under,
With lightnings and thunder,
And the skyĎs becoming gold,
But itís you, the one I hold.

My loveís an intense fire,
With the one desire,
To never see a tear
In your eyes as long as Iím here.

Caught in an insolvable maze,
Asking a solution for this case,
But Iím completely lost,
In this fireís merciless frost.

Itís here, the end of time,
I can hear the burialís chime.
There arenít means for my escape,
While deathís assuming shape.

The instant of my will,
The world stands still.
Kissing you I feel the whole,
Of you and your soul.

I protect you with my embrace,
I admire your wonderful grace,
I love you, I carres your skin,
And I lose you, a terrible sin.

And in front of (the) worldís doom,
My head opens a new room,
Youíre waiting there for me,
If it only could be, if it could beÖ

The Requiem
Spoiler for Hidden:
Introduction:

This is a story
Without glory.
It will be sad,
The end is bad.

Two people were sharing a flat.
They had no reason to be glad.
Their lives did nothing than to whirl.
This is the story of a man and a girl.

The man, he loved that girl
She was his secret pearl.
But to confess he was to shy
Thatís why his pillow never was dry.
The girl, she loved another guy.
But their lives were nothing than a lie.

He was young and he was fine
She wanted to call him "mineĒ
To conquer him she did her best
All the time without some rest.


They never were accepted
Their silence they regretted.
She never obtained his attention.
He never was able to mention
The emotions he had.
And so they got mad.

They only required love
But they never went above
Their worries and fears.
Thatís why in this story are some tears.

Scene 1:

Women thinking on way home:

Day after Day
He passed my way.
Did never feel my heart
He just left me apart.

Youíre the only thing I ever wanted
Of you I was so much enchanted.
You never saw me in the eyes
Youíd have found love which never dies.

But so many times I was ignored.
And it seemed like you were bored,
You didnít care of my existence
And so you broke down my resistance.

Iím not able to defend:
My hope, I see the end.
Iím not able to fight:
The darkness, there is no light.

A requiem in my ear,
I hear it clear.
It sounds so near
And I feel no fear.

I go home, I take the gun
And Iím not making fun
Iím gonna shoot this bullet in my head
And I swear I will be dead.

The requiem dies away
Thereís no need to pray
One Bang, one shot
And on the floor, thereís blood.


Scene 2:

Story of a dead man:

I was walking round
When I suddenly heard a sound.
It slowly came,
As ember grows to flame,
A sad melody,
Playing passionately
Appearing from my soul
And covering me whole.

I felt my love in danger
The song filled me with anger
The thought, it made me ill
Itís death, itís gonna kill.
A countdown began
And against it I started to run.

Every second passed me by
And I just wondered why
I heard this song
And for how long
The melody will play
How long on earth sheíll stay.

I entered into the room
All around was gloom.
I found her dead
The ground was red.

Youíre the only thing I ever wanted
Of you I was so much enchanted.
You never saw me in the eyes
Youíd have found love which never dies.

The Requiem stopped
And a tear just dropped
Down of my face
To the escape of this maze.

I took the gun out of her finger
My requiem, it began to linger
Youíre dead, itís his emblem
Every time, you hear the requiem.

Angel
Spoiler for Hidden:
Youíre my secret treasure
and my painful pleasure.
Youíre my sunray in the sky,
And youíre the reason when I cry.

Youíre an angel sent from paradise
which made me want to rise.
But instead in love I fell.
Now youíre far and Iím in hell.

I tried to reach your (saving) hand,
but now Iím sinking in the (desert) sand.
Thatís why your light is slowly fading,
while my sight keeps shading.

(And) I donít know if you can see
what your devotion means to me.
So tell me if theyíre real,
the emotions that we feel.   

Because Iíd give it all
to break (down/through) this wall
that retains my eyes from seeing
your wonderful and shiny being.

So please donít let me die.
The only thing I desire is to fly
Forever at your warming side,
In freedom and with pride.

Borrow me your smile,
So I can walk another mile,
Toward your wonderful face,
Until I hold you in my embrace.

12 Elements
Spoiler for My submission in the topic "12 elements ... write something about them!":
I walk through the night,
And it's completely dark.
I seek for a warming :light;
There's no hope to create a spark.

I needed some fresh :air,
To walk away from my despair.
But even though I got a deep breath,
It's sure that with :time comes :death.

My :life has become a mess,
The manifestation of :entropy.
I screwed up real bad, I confess.
Nothing awaits me but eternal agony.

I will set myself on :fire,
To become one with the :earth,
That is my last and only desire
So to a purpose my body can serve.

As I'm standing and burning in flames,
God whispers he likes to play games.
I suddenly feel :water, it's rain.
I wanted to die, I scream in pain.

All my strength is leaving,
:gravity brings me to fall,
:darkness around, silence I call.
And my heart keeps bleeding.

....

I feel a :rainbow inside,
The sun is shining bright,
A smile is on my face,
I feel the world's embrace.

It's a new beginning,
Many challenges await me,
But I realize, I am free.
With this gift, I'm winning.


Spoiler for Hidden:
I guess I could continue this for a while but I got other stuff to do (that's why it feels a bit cut off in the end, I'm sorry for that). It was fun to write it and I hope you people enjoy it. Maybe someday I change it to improve it a little, I'm still not completely satisfied with it. I wish my vocabulary was better (english is not my native language, so there might also be some mistakes). Oh, and initially, I lost my train of thought and the poem went into a different direction. You can see the 'alternative continuation' in the second spoiler. Have a nice day everyone :)
Edit: P.S. I wanted to build some card names in it too (some are there) but it really isn't easy and makes the poem ... 'artificial', if you know what I mean.

Spoiler for Alternative Continuation:
This comes after the part where it started raining and screams in pain.


And as my mind is slowly breaking,
And my body won't stop shaking,
I remember my only love, my world.
It hunts me, this sight to behold.

You attracted me like :gravity,
Turned me upside down completely.
Into :aether my heart was sent.
I didn't know what all this meant.

We were each others treasure,
We were each others pleasure,
We shared smiles while kissing,
But soon all this went missing.

....


« Last Edit: December 01, 2013, 09:16:45 PM by Gandora »
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg478924#msg478924
« Reply #1 on: April 10, 2012, 08:15:36 PM »
Nicely done & you really could not tell that english is not your native language. Thanks for sharing!
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg478935#msg478935
« Reply #2 on: April 10, 2012, 08:28:59 PM »
Nicely done & you really could not tell that english is not your native language. Thanks for sharing!

thank you really really much :)
I'm glad you like them :) (and that my english isn't that bad ;) )

Besides, I put two more poems
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg479256#msg479256
« Reply #3 on: April 11, 2012, 03:26:21 PM »
Wow. :o
Although I never liked love poems (at least half of yours are...), these are really well-made and symmetrical(lol).
English isn't my native language either but I suck a lot more compared to you...
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg479266#msg479266
« Reply #4 on: April 11, 2012, 03:41:21 PM »
Wow. :o
Although I never liked love poems (at least half of yours are...), these are really well-made and symmetrical(lol).
English isn't my native language either but I suck a lot more compared to you...
Can I order one for math?

haha, didn't expect you in this section mathematistic ;)

well, thanks a lot for the compliments :) really appreciated.

dunno, but love poems somehow are the easiest because they bring the most of emotions.
though it's been a while since i fell in love >.<

so you want a poem about math? hm... i might try this but as I mentioned in the OP I don't really think when I write. Means I really need a great inspiration xP
But of course, if I ever write one, I'll let you know :)

besides, what's your native language and which poem did you like the most?
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg479438#msg479438
« Reply #5 on: April 11, 2012, 10:08:11 PM »
Very nice to read. A suggestion; to make more sense, whenever you have 'nothing than', put instead, 'nothing but' or 'nothing more(or less) than'
But otherwise, pretty good english
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg479539#msg479539
« Reply #6 on: April 12, 2012, 01:42:19 AM »
Wow. :o
Although I never liked love poems (at least half of yours are...), these are really well-made and symmetrical(lol).
English isn't my native language either but I suck a lot more compared to you...
Can I order one for math?

haha, didn't expect you in this section mathematistic ;)

well, thanks a lot for the compliments :) really appreciated.

dunno, but love poems somehow are the easiest because they bring the most of emotions.
though it's been a while since i fell in love >.<

so you want a poem about math? hm... i might try this but as I mentioned in the OP I don't really think when I write. Means I really need a great inspiration xP
But of course, if I ever write one, I'll let you know :)

besides, what's your native language and which poem did you like the most?

Chinese ;D
And personally I think The Requiem has the best storyline out of all. The situation describes a lot of things... but dramatic at the same time.
I'm in the section to improve my English lol
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg479639#msg479639
« Reply #7 on: April 12, 2012, 06:32:14 AM »
Very nice to read. A suggestion; to make more sense, whenever you have 'nothing than', put instead, 'nothing but' or 'nothing more(or less) than'
But otherwise, pretty good english

thanks!

About the 'nothing than' , I didn't know this, I will change it asap! :)
Always good to learn something ^^

Chinese ;D
And personally I think The Requiem has the best storyline out of all. The situation describes a lot of things... but dramatic at the same time.
I'm in the section to improve my English lol

Ah, I see. I'd never guessed chinese xD Well, thanks for commenting! :)
Besides, I like the Requiem a lot, too x)
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg497714#msg497714
« Reply #8 on: May 13, 2012, 05:08:19 PM »
Nice poems you have there. If one day, I need help with a poem, will u help??
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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg497788#msg497788
« Reply #9 on: May 13, 2012, 07:53:51 PM »
Nice poems you have there. If one day, I need help with a poem, will u help??

Thanks! :)

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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg1006252#msg1006252
« Reply #10 on: October 08, 2012, 07:47:03 PM »
Just posting to say that these are indeed very good poems. Good job! Also, in the top 2nd poem there is still the problem with than. :P
Time for me to post another poem of my own now ;]

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Re: My poems http://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=38426.msg1006257#msg1006257
« Reply #11 on: October 08, 2012, 07:52:05 PM »
Just posting to say that these are indeed very good poems. Good job! Also, in the top 2nd poem there is still the problem with than. :P
Time for me to post another poem of my own now ;]

Finally fixed it ;)
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