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Xenon Persuading Gas | Xenon Persuading Gas https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg210686#msg210686
« on: November 27, 2010, 09:51:44 am »
NAME:
Xenon Persuading Gas
ELEMENT:
Air
COST:
5 :air
TYPE:
Spell
ATK|HP:
TEXT:
Gain control of target creature with 3 HP or less for two turns, It is now airborne
NAME:
Xenon Persuading Gas
ELEMENT:
Air
COST:
6 :air
TYPE:
Spell
ATK|HP:
TEXT:
Gain control of target creature with 5 HP or less for two turns, It is now airborne
ART:
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IDEA:
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NOTES:
Xenon- A colorless, heavy, odorless noble gas, xenon occurs in the Earth's atmosphere in trace amounts
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Target creature becomes "airborne" for rest of game if it wasn't already

Not stackable- you control creature for two turns then it is returned to original owner for at least one turn before another Xenon can be played on same creature

What do you guys think about the cost amount?
 
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Take it easy on me this is my first post in card ideas  ::)        Xenon for mash-up competition!!


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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg210690#msg210690
« Reply #1 on: November 27, 2010, 09:59:25 am »
'mind control' effect seems out of place in Air in my opinion even if you add a little twist ("it now has wings" has no meaning, maybe you need to define what it meant...i believe that creature gained 'airborne'?)
seems more in tune in either Entropy, Darkness or Aether

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg210694#msg210694
« Reply #2 on: November 27, 2010, 10:11:17 am »
'mind control' effect seems out of place in Air in my opinion even if you add a little twist ("it now has wings" has no meaning, maybe you need to define what it meant...i believe that creature gained 'airborne'?)
seems more in tune in either Entropy, Darkness or Aether
yea but the mash up competition only allows spells in   :air :life  :light I like it for  :air
"It now has wings" has no meaning? who cant figure out that means airborne :P
 

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg210696#msg210696
« Reply #3 on: November 27, 2010, 10:17:36 am »
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"It now has wings" has no meaning? who cant figure out that means airborne :P
its not about being smart enough to figure anything out
its about being concise and clear, leaving no room for ambiguity

you said this is your first time posting a card idea, why dont you try to listen to what others have to say
they might have a point  ;)

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg210702#msg210702
« Reply #4 on: November 27, 2010, 10:39:55 am »
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"It now has wings" has no meaning? who cant figure out that means airborne :P
its not about being smart enough to figure anything out
its about being concise and clear, leaving no room for ambiguity

you said this is your first time posting a card idea, why dont you try to listen to what others have to say
they might have a point  ;)
no creatures have the saying "airborne" on them to imply they can fly, the way you tell if they are airborne or not is by actually looking at the picture and seeing if they have wings. so it seemed logical to me to put "It now has wings" plus it fit better in the space for the card

what I was rly wanting was feedback on the cost, and controlling the creature for 2 turns, and the 4 hp and 6 hp clause

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg210712#msg210712
« Reply #5 on: November 27, 2010, 11:09:04 am »
i'm not saying you have to define it on the card itself
the 'Notes' column is there specifically for that reason

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg211252#msg211252
« Reply #6 on: November 28, 2010, 12:49:23 am »
RoL's do not have wings, but they are airborne. So are nymphs (I thiink). Adding "The target creature is now AIRBORNE" is much better then "It now has wings". It made me think that it had dive ability.

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg212284#msg212284
« Reply #7 on: November 29, 2010, 04:22:59 am »
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-You need to add an :air icon after the card's COST in the table (it needs to read '6 :air', not '6', unless you're implying the card uses 6 generic quanta to play - the card's cost must match with the table)
-Leave the ATK|HP section of the table blank if the card is not a creature
-You must provide a link or source of the art in question; 'Unknown' artwork pieces are forbidden to be used. If the art is copyrighted and can't be used, please change it.

Props to having a fairly decent card idea that begins with the letter 'X'. :) Those are always hard to make, especially as your first card idea. ^^;

That said, I think you should replace the term 'Wings' with 'Airbourne' if you can on the card image text and in the table, as the new terms 'Wings' isn't a passive. When I think of Xenon, I usually of an image that would have a concentrated form of gas permeating an area; the mind-control effect is a bit strong, so I agree that the HP should be reduced to make it more balanced (Imagine using this against something as tough as Abyss Crawler or an Otyugh, both of which aren't airbourne O_o).

Otherwise, nice submission.

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Re: Xenon/Xenon https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg212356#msg212356
« Reply #8 on: November 29, 2010, 07:30:00 am »
fixed card cost in table
fixed atk/hp to blank
fixed Art, changed to  -steel golem growing wings in a cloud of xenon gas :P 
fixed term "wings" with "airborne"


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Re: Xenon persuading gas | Xenon persuading gas https://elementscommunity.org/forum/index.php?topic=16457.msg217160#msg217160
« Reply #9 on: December 05, 2010, 11:13:37 am »
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(Due to the edits of this card, it has been unapproved again.)

-Please capitalize the words 'persuading' and 'gas' in the NAME section of your table, AND on the card image for it to be reapproved.

 

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